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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Adulthood (07/30/09)

TITLE: It’s Time to Grow Up!
By
08/03/09


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“Simon!” Dad called from the back of house. “Come and fix up this mess.”

“Uh, oh,” was his only reply as he headed toward the direction of his father’s voice. He stopped in his tracks and watched as bright red soap suds spewed from the family clothes washer. “Oops.”

“Oops is right, Son, and you’d better clean it up before your mother returns from the store. Then you had better deal with that car of yours. The windshield looks like the aftermath of driving through a locus plague.”


Simon entered the kitchen an hour later and watched his parents move about to prepare for the evening meal. Steak, onions and potatoes sat ready for preparing. He was always fascinated and somewhat proud of how they worked together. Simon, being the youngest of five, and at almost twenty three, knew it was time to give his parents a break and move out on his own but...

“Hey, Simon,” his mother interrupted his thoughts. “Are you going to the young adults Bible Study tonight?”

“Yes. I’ve even completed this week’s study questions.” He smiled as he said it.

Dad looked up from chopping onions. Tears ran down his cheeks. “Really?”

Simon grin at the voice that didn’t match the tears, which were obviously not related this latest shock. "Um...yeah. We’re studying Hebrews chapter five. I’m…um...finding it quite interesting.”

His mother wiped her hands and approached the table. She sat opposite her baby. Her tone was serious. “May I ask why?”

Dad continued to chop and sniff.

“I’ll show you.” Simon left the room and returned a few minutes later with his NIV Bible. He opened it to where it was bookmarked. “You see,” he began, “last week’s topic was ‘Warnings Against Falling Away’. Verses 11 to 15 say: ‘We have much to say about this, but it is hard to explain because you are slow to learn. In fact, though by this time you ought to be teachers, you need someone to teach you the elementary truths of God's word all over again. You need milk, not solid food! Anyone who lives on milk, being still an infant, is not acquainted with the teaching about righteousness. But solid food is for the mature, who by constant use have trained themselves to distinguish good from evil.’”

Dad cleaned his glasses before joining them at the table. “What do you think these verses are saying?”

“Well,” he began thoughtfully. “It’s like eating.”

His parents laughed together.

“Yeah, I know. Everything with me is related to food,” he grinned. “But it’s like the verse says, we have to stop just drinking milk and get in to the steak and potatoes of life…and onions,” he finished with a chuckle.

Dad reached across, pulled the Bible to him and turned it around. “Yes. You’re right. We need to grow and mature in His grace.” He paused and turned over a few pages. “Hebrews 10:25-27 also says: ‘Let us not give up meeting together, as some are in the habit of doing, but let us encourage one another—and all the more as you see the Day approaching. If we deliberately keep on sinning after we have received the knowledge of the truth, no sacrifice for sins is left, but only a fearful expectation of judgment and of raging fire that will consume the enemies of God.’”

“Pretty heavy stuff,” Simon sighed. “But I think I’m beginning to understand this whole adulthood stuff. I mean, I’m no longer a child, or a teenager anymore. I’m supposed to be an adult. Right? Not just as a person, but as a Christian. I can’t rely on you and Mom all my life to feed me or clean up after me. In the same way I need to get into the Word…and grow up.”

His mother smiled. “Even us older Christians need to grow. We can never outgrow the need to grow. But, you’re right, Simon. You do need to do this for yourself.” She reached out and touched his hand. “Is there more to this conversation than impressing us?”

Simon took a deep breath. “Well, I like my job and church stuff, but... “

“But what?” Dad asked a hint of worry in his tone.

“This week’s Bible Study has had me seriously praying about a few things. I’m ready to put away childish things. I’ve decided to enter adulthood properly. I’m going to attend Bible College. I believe that’s where God wants me to be.”


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Lisa Johnson 08/06/09
Great story. Great object lesson. Great writing.
Dan Blankenship 08/06/09
A few minor mistakes that I've made myself, many times. Locus should be locusts or locusts', and "uh,oh," is always supposed to be "uh-oh".

Also, using the word "prepare" twice, so close together is usually a no-no.

"Simon grin at the voice that didn’t match the tears" - not sure if you meant to say grinned?

Other than those few small things, it seems like a good entry.

Thanks, and may God always bless you and keep you writing.
Connie Dixon08/11/09
I liked the devotional message within your story. Guess we all need to grow up in some areas. Good job!
Mona Purvis08/11/09
I found myself thinking that this young man had very attentive parents. Good entry.
Mona
Ada Nett08/11/09
Liked the way you set the scene in the kitchen to correlate with the Bible verses...it worked well.
Catrina Bradley 08/11/09
I love the line "We can never outgrow the need to grow." Good stuff. I like the tying in of dinner with the verse and the boy's learning. A few minor typos, but still very nice!
Edmond Ng 08/11/09
I like the story very much, and I like the way Simon puts across his desire to attend Bible College. The desire is so well expressed in your writing, the same feeling I had when I was much younger. Loving the Word of God and desiring to study deep into it should be every Christian's aspiration.
Dan Blankenship 08/11/09
“But what?” Dad asked a hint of worry in his tone.


There should be a comma after "Dad asked".

Other than that, and the errors I mentioned earlier, good work!

May God bless.

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

Sara Harricharan 08/12/09
Hmmm, a very surprising character Simon is. I wished I could have gotten to know more about him-a sequel perhaps? There seems to be a lot more to this story than can fit in the alloted word count. Thank you for sharing!