The Official Writing Challenge
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08/06/09
Lots of beautiful phrases and images in this piece. Putting an extra return between paragraphs will make it easier to read your great thoughts.
08/06/09
Your writing is good. Lots of interesting thoughts. It would have been better, however,if you had broken it into paragraphs of 3 or 4 sentences each. I like to digest and consider each paragraph before I move on to the next. But I see great potential here. God bless you.