The Official Writing Challenge
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07/31/09
Some rich descriptions in this gem:
forgotten kernel of life split, a tendril fought to break free. desire to push away from hibernation bare feet on wet grass; the smell of fruit tress in fragrant splendor
these lines really stirred both heart and soul in me.
Good writing-- good story!
Wonderful! Now I want to read how Mr. Blue Hyacinth enjoyed the creme brulee.
08/02/09
Plenty of great descriptive passages here. I sat down thinking I wouldn't like it very much, lol, but you can't judge a book by its cover! I agree that this does set us up for a sequel.
08/03/09
Look out, Willow, here comes Mr. Right! Delightful story; good writing.
There are so many lovely phrases in this entry, written effortlessly but with great depth. I expect to see you moved up to Masters in no time. Great job!!
08/04/09
Delightful read! So real I could smell the hyacinth!
08/06/09
An enjoyable story. I could sense the freshness of spring as I read it. Good work.
09/08/09
I just LOVED this story. Your description is marvellous! "Willow caught the heady fragrance of hyacinths. She wasn’t sure she wanted to look, but a baby curl of courage escaped her like a runner and she drifted to a display table where only one white hyacinth remained. It was enough. It’s aroma stunned her, evoking the agonies of yesteryear’s spring. Closing her eyes Willow drew in its scent, lost in a sliver of time."...And the ending couldn't have been more romantic...more springlike, a perfect ending for the "winter" she had just gone through....Excellent!!! Helen