The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 768 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
07/30/09
I loved this entry. It really captures the head-butting that takes with newlyweds. You did a fine job writing this.
07/30/09
The honeymoon is definitely over! Great story.
07/30/09
How funny! Excellent. Love it:)
07/30/09
I liked this so much I read it again! The twist at the end is perfect.
07/30/09
What a great entry! I never would have guessed they were newlyweds...I pictured a couple that had been together for a few years. Very humorous and entertaining all the way through. Well done!
07/31/09
Loved the inner dialogue of the feisty spirit wrestling it out with the compliant (Proverb)ial woman. Even though the dinner party was a success, I'm still not too sure which one of the two won - after all, pulling those hairs through the shirt had to say something about who was left standing. Great, fun story. Well written.
08/01/09
So many funny lines in this story. I laughed out loud as I read it. Great job!
08/03/09
I really really liked this and could picture the slowly brewing frustration and disbelief, perfectly contrasted against the man's completely realistic insensibility.
I appreciate that the honeymoon ending works well as a twist, but I wonder if it doesn't distract from the wife's sense of being hard done by. After all I could easily go through weeks without noticing that the sheets hadn't been changed...
08/03/09
Oh man... this is SO true-to-life! I love the twist at the end--it points out the truly angst-ridden adjustment period between newlyweds. Everything is so much WORSE than the new bride and groom imagine. (;
08/03/09
Love the humor in this creative piece. Excellent writing as always!
08/03/09
LOL! Love the double meaning of your title AND that you used the word "grody"! :) What a great ending!
08/03/09
I was drawn in by the title which reminded me of a little ditty we said when we were kids:
"Spring has spring, the grass has riz,
I wonder where the birdies is."
Your entry was such a fun read that if we took a vote, you'd be named one of the best humorists in FW. Kudos, big time!!!
08/03/09
Just shaking my head at this one! Very entertaining, well written and oh...so funny.
Mona
08/04/09
I loved the surprise ending, never suspected newlyweds. I think I was married to that guy's clone.......
08/04/09
Lisa, Lisa, Lisa. You never fail to entertain. I loved this - every jot of humour oozing from the lines (or should that be the cracked egg?).

In a remote location of my heart, there’s a Proverbs 31 woman raking a tin cup across metal bars, oh my, this topped it off. LOL this and the ending.
08/04/09
Phooey. Lynne stole my quote. I belly laughed at the Proverbs 31 line...what a riot. Loved every second...from start to finish. This must be a winner.
08/04/09
Your mind kinda amazes me. :)

In a remote location of my heart, there’s a Proverbs 31 woman raking a tin cup across metal bars.

That image just slays me. LOL

Who would ever think of that?

YOU! ;) Great writing.

08/05/09
Masterful! I can't help but love this man... I mean really, the polo shirt, the chest hairs, the complete lack of perception!!! He's a keeper ;-) The female robin choosing the longest, blackest plume... love it!!! I too, belly laughed at the Proverbs 31 woman. This whole piece was wonderful - you know just how to do it Lisa.
08/05/09
Life's a struggle and to begin it right from the start of a married life requires more than mutual understanding for a marriage to last! You've put through in humorous words an important message for newly weds. I like the voice in the story. A very interesting read indeed.