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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Spring (the season) (07/23/09)

TITLE: Spring Rites
By Patricia Herchenroether
07/29/09


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Dripping water from the eaves
infused my dreams with sound.
Clumps of snow rolled down the roof
and plopped! onto the ground.

A sudden crack of gunshot
jerked me wide awake in dread.
But reality, no weapons seen,
changed fear to verve instead.

I grabbed my boots and parka,
quickly skid-danced to the shore.
My eyes and ears confirmed the hunch-
Spring breakup came once more!

All along the shoreline
people stood and gawked in awe.
The frozen mass of winterís wrath
groaned from its tortured thaw.

Sketched fissures radiated
from the center of the floe,
expanded into runnels,
birthing isles of ice and snow.

Slabs with different points of view
shouldered, shoved with force;
deciding which had right of way,
continued on their course.

Smaller chunks, less fortunate,
could only bob and shiver.
Run over by aggressive blocks,
they shrank and joined the river.

As open-water loomed and grew,
the ice-jam moved downstream.
Tonight weíll meet and celebrate
the sanction of a dream.

No longer in an icy grip,
waves slapped against the quay.
Whitewater roared in its escape
and rushed upon its way.


Authorís note: The end of a dark, harsh winter in the far north can certainly be a
reason for residents to celebrate. In many regions, however, spring breakup creates
vast amounts of devastating floodwaters


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Connie Dixon08/01/09
I thought this was really well written and has a nice flow to it. I've heard ice crack in the spring and it's an eerie sound. Good job!
Dee Yoder 08/03/09
Wonderful descriptions here! I haven't been around a large body of water when it thaws, but it always amazes me how quickly the water can warm and begin to flow in the spring.
Tallylah Monroe08/03/09
Creative. I could see and feel this.
Laury Hubrich 08/03/09
This is something new for me, too. Awesome descriptions of the ice thawing out. Very good job.
Bryan Ridenour08/04/09
Such a descriptive look at the "Northern Thaw". I could picture the break-up in your choices of poetic words. Well done!
Laura Manley08/05/09
How descriptive! I was with you through the entire imagery of your poem. Excellent!
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/05/09
You did a great job personifying the various segments of breaking ice. Your word choices were excellent--culminating in a very creative poem.