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TITLE: A children's picture story: Fred the Flower.
By Josiah Kane
07/28/09

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Note to parents: encourage your child to guess the words represented by the pictures. You can check the actual word by holding your mouse pointer over the picture.

Fred the Flower: Fred

Fred's

started to ring. Fred Blinked and yawned

as he rolled

slowly out of bed.

Suddenly he noticed

that there was

light coming through his window

. It was only

six o'clock but the Sun

was already

peeking over the hills

. Without turning off the alarm clock

ran outside.

All his friends

came happily

into the

bowed to Rose who smiled

shyly

from behind the door

of her house.

happily towards

the rising Sun

. He politely

greeted Mr. and Mrs. Butterfly

as they danced

merrily beneath the Rainbow

in the warm

fresh air. He giggled

at the

skipping down the hills

. Then

gazed up

at the

, and thought of clouds

sprinkling down rain

as the

kept shining

down on his leaves

and his friends played

happily all day long.

Spring had

finally arrived.

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Member Comments
Member	Date
Gregory Kane	07/30/09
Hats off for creativity. I certainly had no difficulty visualising the scene! I did feel however that your characters were a bit two-dimensional. Anyway thanks for a wonderfully animated story - I have never quite seen anything like it in FaithWriters.
Allen Stark	07/30/09
Thanks. A breasth of fresh air for the children's story hour.
Joanne Sher	07/31/09
My daughter LOVED this. SO creative. I'm pretty sure this is a challenge first.
Sara Harricharan	07/31/09
WOW! I definitely have to give you hats off and credits for such a creative piece! This is definitely a first for FW, I do believe, but I loved this short children's tale. This was lovely! Kudos to you!
Leah Nichols	07/31/09
Wow....that's so cool! Um, I thought the story kind of short and maybe could use a little more of a connected theme, but I also have no idea how long that took, so yeah....wow....nice work!
Sharon Kane	07/31/09
When our boys were around 2-3 years old I used to read them a 'lift the flap' book, "Spot's walk in the woods". This delightful story takes me right back to those happy days with small children on my lap! This is just gorgeous, and pitched perfectly at very young children. And the skill that must have gone into creating those pictures... fantastic!!
Carol Slider	07/31/09
"It was a fun story! Now Fred can go to sleep and wake up and play tomorrow!" --Simon Slider, Age 6
Mona Purvis	08/03/09
I'm jealous. I want to be able to "compose" like that. You did a good job on the children's story and all it needs is a group of children sitting down and someone to show this story. Great teaching tool. Also, I think it can be said that Spring was so well described with so few words. A+ Mona
Virgil Youngblood	08/03/09
Wonderfully done, however it was done.
Tallylah Monroe	08/03/09
Very cute.
Laury Hubrich	08/03/09
Wow! How did you do that? I am very impressed:)
Glynis Becker	08/03/09
Definitely one of the most creative pieces I've seen...great job!
Jackie Wilson	08/04/09
Can't wait to read this with my six year old grandson! Way cool!
Diana Dart	08/04/09
Cute and oh so cheerful! Just lovely.
Pamela Kliewer	08/04/09
At first I thought I was back on the forums, because of seeing the flower... you did a great job with this. VERY creative.
Laura Manley	08/04/09
This is absolutely adorable! If you don't make some kind of a showing for this darling story, something is wrong! Can't wait to see where it places in the Writing Challenge. Laura
Loren T. Lowery	08/05/09
This is as creative as the word labyrinth you created a while back in intermediate. Great job then and now!
Seema Bagai	08/12/09
I think you need to create an entire web site of this kind of story. I'm certain the kinder and first grade teachers I work with will use them with their students. You have a depth of knowledge of technology and creativity that will bless many people.
Kristen Hester	08/12/09
I remembered this story and just looked it up to consul a fussy two-year-old. It worked like a charm. He loves it! Thanks!