The Official Writing Challenge
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08/15/05
The description of the Moke's progress up the hill is great! That last line about scattering her ashes on the Caribbean...a little chilling, almost like a prophetic word!
08/15/05
The descriptions in paragraph eleven were very vivid and commendable. Well done.

The last line was a great finish albeit surprising.My mouthfell open.
08/15/05
An enjoyable read. Vivid descriptive sentences. I think I want to go there right now! :)
08/16/05
Had me sucked in for a while there! Not another travelogue! :-( then Oh, it's... Great flashback that fill in some more gaps.
08/18/05
Felt the draw to this little piece of Paradise...so lovely! Was taken off guard by the surprise comment at the end. Where did THAT come from?? :-)
08/19/05
Once again the saga with a twist. Good way to lead to the next chapter. Great work!
08/19/05
Another enjoying story :)
08/20/05
You've painted a beautiful picture of the island. Can understand why you want to resettle there. Good entry.
08/21/05
Ah-ha! This was the first article I picked to read for some reason--I just have to find out more! (LOL) This is all to suspenseful, and intriquing--little at a time. Very sneaky and clever!-but I knew from the on-set. Lovely again. God bless ya, littlelight