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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: Inquiring Mind
By Verna Cole Mitchell
07/20/09


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How can it be Iím old enough
To act responsibly,
But still I have to follow rules
My parents make for me?

Why is it when I try to show
Innate athletic grace,
I trip upon my growing feet
And fall upon my face?

Why is the stuff so very dull
We have to learn at school,
And why do all the other kids
Have parents that are cool?

Why should my parents call my room
A national disgrace,
When Iím the one who has to live
Inside this messy place?

Why do I fall in love so much
With first one, then the other,
Though itís not real, just puppy love,
According to my mother?

Why do I try to please my peers
And seek the things they seek,
While wishing other people would
Consider me unique?

Why am I sometimes happy, and
Then right away, Iím sad?
Why donít I say and do the things
I later wish I had?

Dad has the answer to my plight.
He says itís of the essence;
Iím not an adult nor a child,
But live in adolescence.

He says itís just a stage Iím in,
And I donít have to love it.
Itís only temporary though;
Heís sure Iíll grow out of it,

And all the questions I have now,
The Dear Lord understands.
Heís loved me since before my birth
And holds me in His hands.


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william price07/23/09
Lots of truth packed into this nice little poem. I think we all have been there. Thank God he let us escape. God bless.
Mariane Holbrook07/23/09
I think you've neatly packaged every question and emotion teenagers have to deal with. You write so effortlessly and your meter is perfect. I found myself tapping my fingers on my desk as I read and it was such a smooth and perfect exercise. What a great read by an exceptional writer!
Noel Mitaxa 07/27/09
You've expanded so well on the adolescent quest that is expressed in another, much-shorter poem: "I - Why?"
Gregory Kane07/27/09
You well covered the various bases of adolescence. Your last stanza caused me to wonder about Jesus' teenage years. More than any of us he must surely have asked incredibly searching questions about who he truly was!
Loren T. Lowery07/27/09
Some of these things I've yet to out grow! : ) It's hard to choose one stanza over another as being a favorite, but one in particular, I know Paul (from the Bible) struggled with it, too - he said something like why is that I do and say what I don't want to and yet don't do or say what I know I should? Sounds like this adolescence thing is one for the ages!
Amy Michelle Wiley 07/27/09
I've wondered that one about the messy bedroom many times, haha. Cute poem.
Bryan Ridenour07/29/09
Great poem with a super look into the challenges of a teen's life. Very well written!
Betty Castleberry07/29/09
"Why is it when I try to show
Innate athletic grace,
I trip upon my growing feet
And fall upon my face?"

That line made me chuckle. As always, Verna, you've managed to write an entertaining poem with a message. Well done.
Carol Slider 07/29/09
Very nice job of summarizing the teen experience! Well done.
Mona Purvis07/29/09
You've captured what being a teen is...a lot of unanswered questions that they nor anyone else really know the answers to. It is brilliant that you write this piece in the form of questions. Just brilliant. Wish I had thought of that.
Mona
Sara Harricharan 07/29/09
I can relate to that school verse. lol. well done!
Loren T. Lowery07/30/09
Verna - this is so good to see : ) Congratulations, I so enjoy your poetry and your perseverance in writing it and sharing it with others!
Mariane Holbrook07/30/09
Congratulations on a well-deserved win!!! I'm so proud of you I could pop!
Now I want you to win BOB next time around!!! You go, girl!!
LaNaye Perkins07/30/09
You did a wonderful job on the Verna. Well done my friend, well done.
LaNaye Perkins07/30/09
ooops, should have proof read before posting.... I meant to say: You did a wonderful job on THIS Verna.

Loose nut behind my keyboard this morning. :)
Yvonne Blake 07/30/09
Woo Hoo, Verna!
Beth LaBuff 07/30/09
Verna.... LOVE THIS! ....especially the line about the "national disgrace"! Super congrats on placing!!!