The Official Writing Challenge
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07/23/09
Loved the mutt's name-Spooky, that was creative. I almost thought this was a ghost story, lol, good twist!
07/23/09
Another kool title, I must have shopped this week at Title-Mart. Anyway, nice piece. I enjoyed reading it. I really liked the monologue bit toward the end. God bless.
07/23/09
You created a great character in this piece.
07/25/09
I appreciated the way the first three paragraphs used harsher words and phrases to describe the bleak situation, then the wordings became gentler and flowing with Jackie's thoughts and activities. Enjoyed your story!
07/26/09
Great writing. You painted such strong characters here, and hope certainly shone through the midst of great misfortune. Some great turns of phrase. My favourites were:
... leaving little Hansel and Gretel crumbs of volcanic rock in a cinder-sharp, emotionally painful wake.
and:
...and gazed into his saggy hound-eyes until his tongue bathed her face with baptismal kisses.
Very creative. Well done.
07/27/09
Well-drawn characters, insights and moods.