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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Adolescence/Teen Years (07/16/09)

TITLE: TEENAGERS AT HEART
By Eureka F. Collins
07/17/09


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Sabrina was walking in front of her parents while at Arundel Mills Mall. The mall was heavily crowded with teens. As many teens passed by, it was easy to observe their parents in tow. Yet, there were groups of teens shopping, standing around talking, or just eating and texting.

In various stores, on both sides of the mall, you could see pink hair, blue hair, green hair and even gold hair. This must be the latest fashion.

Sabrina suddenly stopped and pulled out a glittering gadget that was blasting Cindy Laupers 1980’s song, “Girls Just Want To Have Fun.” It was a text messenger. She typed POS (parent over shoulder) into it and continues walking.

They passed by a toy store and Sabrina’s mother informs her that it was 6:05 pm and they had to be at the Church by 7:15 pm. Her father wanted to go inside the toy store. Scrabble, Monopoly, Trouble, Old Maid, Connect Four, and several other board and card games occupied the shelves. Sabrina’s father was overjoyed and had a story to tell of growing up as a teenager with those notable favorites. Sabrina’s mother smiled with glee as she remembered her own teenage moments.

Sabrina just shook her head and continued walking.

She suddenly stopped walking and started texting.

“OMG! IC, BF!” (Oh my God! I see my boyfriend!)

“U_?” text response. (You what!)

“My bad. Emo” (My mistake. Emotional)

“G2G, BF4L” (Got to go—Best Friends for life)

“Mom, Dad…let’s look at some rides. I know there are some out here that are off the chain.”

Sabrina’s parents thought she wanted to go over to the mall’s carousel or the bike section of the store.

“Brina, you are getting too big for riding the bikes they have in here, don’t you think?” said her father. “And the carousel has many children that are lined up, honey!”

“Ooooo!” grunted Sabrina.

Her parents did not realize that Sabrina wanted to look at some shoes (rides) that were cool (off the chain). Her parents continue reminiscing of their teenage years as they saw more games (i.e. Trouble, Twister, etc). Now, earlier that day the family prayed together and asked God to keep them in harmony with one another and open the lines of family communication.

Sabrina turned and observed her parents excited over seeing the games of their youth. Remembering her family’s prayer, she walked over; and asked them which were their favorite board games.

“Monopoly!” her parents responded simultaneously.

“Well, I will purchase it as my gift to you and you can teach me how to play.”

“Brina, that is thoughtful of you,” said her mother.

“No good deed goes unrecognized. What can we purchase for you that you can teach your mother and me?”

“Dad, you don’t have to. You and mom always bless me in your own awkward ways,” said Sabrina with a smile.

“But we want to, Brina.”

“Well, how about a Wii?”

“A what?”

“A Wii. Our teenage years are like different worlds. Mom, Dad, a Wii is a home video game console; sort of like, the Xbox 360 and PlayStation 3.”

“Is that an iPod or YouTube?”

“No, Mom.”

“Honey, are you sure those are games?”

“I’m sure. Look! There’s one.”

Sabrina saw a display and started to teach her parents the basics and the nature of how the Wii works. The family was laughing and enjoying themselves. Sabrina’s father glanced at his watch and realized it was time to depart for church.

“I enjoyed the tennis game, Brina,” said her mother. “We are going to have a lot of fun with this Wii.”

Her father purchased the Wii and Sabrina purchased the Monopoly game. They departed the mall and Sabrina asked her mother to sit in the back seat of the car with her. She then asked her mother to pull out her cellular phone.

“Mom, let me show you something.”

Sabrina taught her mother how to send text messages. Soon they arrived at the church. Her parents went to one area and Sabrina sat with her friends. All three of them were thinking about the time spent together and the prayer earlier prayed.

“You know sweetheart, things seem to have changed since our teenage years,” said Sabrina’s father to her mother.

Then her mother’s cellular phone vibrated. It was a text message from Sabrina.

“LUV_U”

“M2” responded her mother.

“You know…we’re all teenagers at heart, dear?” said her mother to her father while laughing out loud. (LOL)


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Seema Bagai 07/23/09
Good job conveying the generation gap. I thought it was interesting the teen had an 80s song on her cell. Good work.
Robyn Burke07/23/09
Fun to make the comparisons between generations. Good job. Sabrina seems like a mature teen with a good relationship with her parents -- a breath of fresh air!

The past tense-present tense style of writing switched back and forth through out the story which was distracting. Noticed a couple of POV shifts also.