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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: Summer Sun
By Melanie Kerr
07/16/09


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Summer sun, having fun
Picnics on the beach
Buckets, spades, large sunshades
From dusty cupboards reach

Suntan lotion, magic potion
Safe from harmful rays
Gently toasting, lightly roasting
Sun on warm skin plays

Shells galore along the shore
Precious treasure seeking
Pressed to ear, we can hear
The sea so gently speaking

Exploring pools, for tiny jewels
Under sea weed finding
Small hand grabs trundling crabs
Around the water winding

Sculpting sand, castle grand
Building ramparts high
Water spilling, deep moat filling
Against the tide so sly

Children racing, waves embracing
Crested water splashing
Water wings, inflated things
Sun reflected, flashing

Ice cream thick, melting quick
Leaving sticky trails
Fish and chips, ketchup drips
While watching far off sails

Dark clouds form, announcing storm
A flash of summer lightning
Shelter gain, to watch the rain
But soon the sky is brightening

Tired, weary, quietly cheery
Time to leave the scene
Footprints showing, to and fro-ing
Spells where we have been


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Laury Hubrich 07/17/09
This poem describes summer perfectly. Very good job!
Mariane Holbrook07/17/09
This is perfect! I love the rhyme, the meter, everything. It's lilting and it's fun and it's a winner! Tell them I said so! **grin**
Eliza Evans 07/18/09
Absolutely DELICIOUS!! Title is sort of bland though. ;)
Never mind...What a joy to read this lovely poetry.
Catrina Bradley 07/19/09
I love this poem for the picture of a perfect summer day it sings. The bouncy rhythm even feels like summer! Lovely work.
Jim McWhinnie 07/19/09
Wonderfully lyrical ... I believe it was all those ...ing verbs that made it sparkle.

The poem felt like ... well, it felt like summer.
Jackie Wilson07/20/09
You painted a delightful picture of so many aspects of a summer day at the beach.
I wanted to put a melody with your words and sing it!
Graham Starling07/21/09
Wow! This is clever. So many aspects of summer with delightful and unexpected rhymes. Rhythmic and unforced throughout.
Gregory Kane07/21/09
What a lot of fun! Right here where we are, it's the middle of winter and I am decidedly feeling the chill. (Mind you, the thermometer's reading 20C) So Thanks for the reminder of how it's meant to be.
Sharon Kane07/22/09
This is magical, the way summer is meant to be, the way it was when we were children, the way we can't quite re-create it when the responsibilities of adult life and parenthood encroach!
Sara Harricharan 07/22/09
Simply lovely.