The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/09
I couldn't quite figure out what was going on until the end. Good job. It was very different, for sure.
07/17/09
Just so all know - I love different entries;) lol. I wanted to clarify that. This is not an entry you can read quickly and 'get it.' You have to pay attention and when you don't - you truly miss out because it has a big twist and is most hilarious.
07/18/09
Clever and well-written.
07/19/09
Quite a thoughtful and somehow intricately crafted ... almost as if a literary puzzle.

Quite intriguing and absorbing.
07/20/09
Some of your descriptions are very good. I have yet to truly surrender to summer.
07/20/09
Ah, this is so cool! Like Jim said, a bit of a literary puzzle. Enthralling and very clever!
What a delightful twist! I think you're going to be surprised how much the judges like this one! If they're looking for something new and different by a master wordsmith, they tuned in to the right channel on this entry. Kudos, you little sweetie, you!!
Summer has the mind of a cat! Nice. As a long standing prisoner, I thoroughly enjoyed this. Some interesting turns of phrase to. "The claws of my clutch" - oddly turned around.
The word donning seemed a little out of place though as I understand it to mean putting on rather than wearing.
07/22/09
A fun story, with a very clever ending! Summer can indeed be very seductive, if we let it. Well done!
Terrific writing, you had me in suspense trying to figure out that off-stage 3rd voice. Very clever and oh so creative indeed. Loved it!
07/22/09
Heehee! Original and clever. yay for summer! Another one claimed, mwahahaha...LOL! Loved the way his thoughts in italics mixed with the reality of his wife's questioning. Very nicely done.
07/23/09
LOL.. you totally got me. I could not figure out who the MC was! Too funny. Congratulations!!
07/23/09
Never would have thought of summer stalking its victim. Really excellent.
I kept wondering and didn't figure out your MC until the end. I love your word paintings! Congratulations!
Congratulations Catrina! Your creativity is a delightful treat! You skillfully stalked your prey and hooked me with this cute story :-) !
07/31/09
To use "summer" as your MC was quite creative and entertaining too. I could feel the sprays of water and the soft sand as I journeyed through this great story.