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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: Come Unto Me
By Christina Banks
07/15/09


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Fiery oranges and reds streak a burning trail across the sky, chasing each other over the clouds and playing hide and seek behind the distant hills. A lone loon calls from the quiet lake; the waters - a perfect reflection of the tapestry of light above. You sit at the end of the dock, a solitary observer to the wonders of this creation. You are alone, but not lonely. You have come here for rest - a break from the busyness of life.

You know you can find serenity, tranquility, peace here. Every summer, you make the pilgrimage to this place. Your father introduced you to the little cottage on the lake. It had been his refuge too. That first year, on this very lake, he taught you to fish. Perch, bullheads and largemouth bass took turns fighting your line that summer.

The warm breeze caresses your face like the sweet memories of days gone by. Nearby, a cricket begins his evening song. The bullfrogs join in, adding a steady bass line to the cricketís tenor voice. A fish jumps from the water, sending an ever widening ring of circles rippling toward the shore.

A scripture passage, memorized long ago, touches the edge of your conscience - just out of reach. The words lap at your memory, like the waves gently washing over pebbles on the beach. You close your eyes and try to bring the words into focus.

Come unto me, all ye that labour and are heavy laden, and I will give you rest.

The still, small voice whispers to you. You open your eyes. Early stars twinkle down from the dusky heavens. The loon cries again, its eerie call echoing across the water.

Take my yoke upon you, and learn of me; for I am meek and lowly in heart: and ye shall find rest for your souls.

A mosquito buzzes near your ear, but you donít move. Your attention is focused on the words as you let them wash over you, cleansing your soul. Worries, which have been weighing down on your shoulders, begin to lift.

For my yoke is easy, and my burden is light.

You find rest at the feet of Jesus.

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Matthew 11:28-30 KJV


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Karlene Jacobsen 07/17/09
When I travel to the northern parts of Michigan, sit on the edge of the river or stare out across Lake Superior, I find myself experiencing the calm that your devotional speaks of. I find myself feeling as though Jesus stands beside me, hand outstretched, showing me His handiwork. WOW!
Carol Slider 07/20/09
This is so vividly described and evocative! Well done.
Seema Bagai 07/20/09
You created a vivid picture with words. At first, I was put off with the second person POV, but as the piece continued, I enjoyed it since it wasn't preachy. Good job.
Steve Fitschen 07/20/09
You used a TON of adjectives, which is normally a no-no; yet it didn't seem overly done (even though somehow it registered with me). The fourth paragraph was great!
Jeanne E Webster 07/21/09
This was sooooo relaxing..."And I shall give you rest."

Very charming piece that brought back wonderful memories. Thanks!
Pamela Kliewer07/21/09
Ahhh... I feel refreshed just reading this. Very well done. Thank you.
Mariane Holbrook07/22/09
I agree about the 4th paragraph. I could feel, hear, smell and see the gentle lapping of the waves. This is such a restful, pleasant entry. I hope the judges look very favorably on it! Kudos!
Patricia Herchenroether07/22/09
A story written in 2nd person usually irritates me. This well-written entry didn't. I felt serenity myself at the end.
Stephanie Craig07/22/09
It was hard to read at the beginning, because I am not a fan of second person. But then, I loved it. I could feel myself there. Great job.
Sara Harricharan 07/22/09
Lovely descriptions, it brought me right there.
Catrina Bradley 07/22/09
I like the POV, except for in the 2nd paragraph; the fishing "memories" won't resonate with everyone - - but the rest of this beautiful piece does (or at least it does with me). The transition into the Bible verse flows naturally, and the ending left me feeling uplifted.