The Official Writing Challenge
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08/08/05
Nice writing. Your second last paragraph seemed to detract from the peaceful feel of the rest of the piece. Perhaps writing about the peaceful presence of the Lord during the times of focus on Him would have flowed better.
08/10/05
Good story and lesson.
08/13/05
Good grasp of word usage. Nice entry. It's easy to loose the reason why we get away. Good lesson as well.
08/14/05
Well written -I could see the boys' antics :) I nice piece.