The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/09
Interesting conversation between two old friends. I liked the names you gave everyone-made this story a fun read.
07/17/09
An enjoyable read with fun characters.
07/20/09
Lovely storytelling with charming characters. And I agree -- great names.

I'd like to read a rewrite of this piece with an eye toward simplifying the sentences. I think it would bring the language into the same tone of simplicity that is found in the charming and rustic storyline.

Your writing is so rich in imagery.
07/20/09
Love these two old codgers. I wondered if they were going to find a couple of sweethearts after their diversion down Lover's Lane but I'm glad they decided to go "tidy" up their own gardens. A very entertaining and well written story.
07/21/09
There are some great little episodes here, well articulated and authentic sounding. But I felt a little let down by the ending and found myself wondering what the point of the story was. Maybe there simply isn't one or perhaps I missed it. But there you have it.
I'm sorry there was never a Lover's Lane near where I grew up - sounds like I missed out on a bit of larking around. (Interpret that as you will!)
07/21/09
What a great story and a fun read! I know you must have had a good time writing this one! I enjoyed it and I hope the judges enjoy it enough to place you high in the tallies. Very good job!!!
07/22/09
You have a lot of good descriptions and visual imagery.