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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Summer (the season) (07/09/09)

TITLE: How I Know My Mom Can't Count
By Diana Dart
07/15/09


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My mom knows how to get mud stains out of my clothes,
She also has a sensor that knows when to wipe my nose,
But now I have to tell her that she really blows
At counting Ė one, two, three.

Mom is sure that two cookies will fill my tummy up,
But once I ate thirteen more with milk in my cup.
Then she piled the veggies high and expected me to sup,
Confusing Ė least to me.

When June has come, she grows worse now that the summerís here.
Water bombs on trampolines bring her two steps too near.
And she insists that one small snake is not a pet so dear,
One only Ė it canít be.

On rainy days she just canít count the short time that I sit,
And watch TV or play vid games because she has a fit.
ďTurn that off, youíve watched all day,Ē but itís too soon to quit,
Just started Ė woe is me.

Not food, not steps, not pets nor shows, the numbers she canít do.
Now she claims these months are long and school has grown short too.
And when two pals plus me go play, she screams itís like a zoo,
Her errors, she canít see.

My mom is sweet and she smells nice, her chicken is so good.
But maybe when school starts again, go back to class she should,
And learn to measure, count and add Ė some homework if she could.
It might help Ė one, two, three.


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Sharon Kane07/17/09
A fun read.
I kept trying to find a meter and not managing it, which was a bit frustrating.
You really did get the child's voice and priorites perfect!
Charla Diehl 07/17/09
The short last line in each stanza seemed to jar the meter a bit--but I did like the fun way you presented the mother from her child's POV.
Jim McWhinnie 07/18/09
You truly are a dictionary of rhyming words - well chosen.

I felt as if I were looking through a shoebox full of summer vacation photos.
Laura Manley07/19/09
This put a smile on my face! Very cleverly written! At first, I had a little trouble with the fourth line in each verse, but the more I read, the more I liked what you had done with the poem.
Amy Michelle Wiley 07/20/09
I had a little trouble with the meter, too (and not just the shorter lines), but loved the message. It's so true! haha