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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Retreat (as in quiet time away) (08/01/05)

TITLE: The bubble bath
By darlene hight
08/07/05


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Category: Slice of Life Illustration
Aprox. 5 mins.

Synopsis: Nothing is more important than getting alone with God. This is a lighthearted look at one Mom’s alone time.

Cast: One female- Mom Offstage voices- Older daughter/ Lisa, Younger daughter/ Jenny, Dad

Props: One non-descript stool, Bible and other devotional books

Setting: General Stage

Scripture: Luke 4:42


[Scene opens- Mom sitting on a stool, reading her Bible. A few other devotional books scattered on the floor.]

[Mom intently reading for several moments before dialogue begins]

Lisa: Mom, I think that Kevin needs a diaper change.

Mom: Sweetheart, would you change him for me, please?

Lisa: Alright. Come on Kevin let’s get you out of that thing.

[Closing her eyes and shooting up a popcorn prayer]
Mom: Thank you Lord for giving me such a helpful and responsible daughter.
[Returns to reading]
[A beat]

Jenny: Mom! Jeffy took my doll! He’s swinging her around on a rope! Make him leave my stuff alone!

Mom: Go tell your dad, Honey. He’ll take care of it.

Jenny: I already did. He just laughed.

Mom: Tell your dad that I said it isn’t funny when Jeffy is mean to your special doll and tell Jeffy that I said to give you your doll back.

Mom: Lord, I know that it’s just a stage but, please, help the twins to get along with each other.

Jenny: He said that he was sorry!

Mom: Jeffy said that he was sorry?

Jenny: No! Daddy said that he was sorry. Jeffy said, “ Nyah, Nyah…You’re a baby. Here’s your stupid doll.”

Mom: I’ll talk with Jeffy.
[back to reading]

Lisa: Mom, Aunt Shelia is on the phone.

Mom: Tell her I’ll call her back in a little while.

[popcorn prayer]
Mom: Lord, I know that Shelia is hurting but I don’t know what else to say to her. She needs to come back to you, Lord. Please, help her to find her way back.

Lisa: Mom, Kelly wants to know if I can go with her to the mall. May I?

Mom: OK Honey. Be home by eight.

Lisa: OK, See you later. Love you.

[popcorn prayer]
Mom: Lord, keep her safe and help her to make wise choices.

Jenny: Mom! I have to use the bathroom.

Mom: OK, I’ll be out in just a minute.
[begins picking up books]

Dad: What are you doing in there, taking a bubble bath?

Mom: (smiling) Thanks for the bubble bath, Lord.

[Lights out}


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Lynda Lee Schab 08/08/05
Very realistic scene. Sometimes the bathroom is the only "retreat" we mothers get. But even then we're not alone. LOL
Great job. Loved the skit.
Blessings, Lynda
Dixie Phillips 08/08/05
Adorable! Calgon, take me away!
Beth Muehlhausen08/09/05
Cute drama! Yay for bubble baths!!! :-)
Debra Brand08/10/05
There's just no privacy when kids are in the house! Good work!
Joanne Malley08/10/05
Bubble bath? What's that? :) Adorable skit; so true regarding the life of many moms!
Sally Hanan08/10/05
Funny :)
Penny Baldwin08/10/05
This sums up my summer holiday at the moment!
janet rubin08/11/05
I can relate! Wouldn't this be a great skit to do AT a women's retreat?
Melanie Kerr 08/11/05
Very enjoyable to read. I like the way that prayer is so connected to everyday life.
Jan Ackerson 08/11/05
I've never heard the phrase "popcorn prayer" before, but it's a perfect description. Delightful!
Linda Watson Owen08/11/05
This is so practically true of any mother's life! A really cute skit!
Shari Armstrong 08/11/05
Very nice - nothing like a nice relaxing bubble bath and time with God.
Karen Ward08/11/05
Oh so true! I remember the days when the bathroom was a quiet place, no more...sigh. This was a great piece, I too would love to see it used at a women's retreat!
Suzanne R08/12/05
What a great twist at the end ... despite the title, I hadn't realized that she was in the bath - excellent. I love to take my worship music in when I have a bubble bath - it is a real retreat!
Pat Guy 08/12/05
You got me on this one! LOL! I keep having favorite ones! Totaly relate to the "popcorn prayer." :) Loved it!
Julianne Jones08/13/05
Great skit. This needs to be used - and not just at Women's retreats! I'm amazed that anyone can write a skit in under 750 words and do such a great job of it! Thanks for sharing.
Maxx .08/13/05
Simple, effective, very strong entry. Could it be the first drama in the top 8? Great message.
Amy Michelle Wiley 08/13/05
hahaha! That was great. I loved the surprise of her being in the bathroom at the end (I know the title should have clued me in, but hey, what can I say, I got involved in the story and forgot the title!) Good job!


   
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