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07/16/09
I enjoyed the descriptions and analogies.

Just my opinion, but I thought the title didn't fit with the lyrical, sentimental prose of the piece.

This is a beautifully written piece and one, as a teacher, I could easily relate to.
07/16/09
I so agree with Seema. There was such a heart in the teacher that the title was misleading.
07/17/09
I enjoyed your shoreline analogies. Leaves me hankering too after a quiet week on the beach.
07/17/09
I like the way you show that this teacher cares for each of her pupils uniquely, and notices each one. There did seem to be a bit of a jump between what she will do on holiday (thinking from the classroom) and what she is doing on the beach (present tense). However the running theme of caring doesn't really get jarred. Indeed It is particularly noticible that she, while on her heavenly holiday from school, is thinking about the children's individual streangths and hardships.
As a retired teacher, I LOVED this entry. It has a "user-friendly" feel that I find very comforting and inspirational. Good job!!