The Official Writing Challenge
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Ah, dreams! Such a wonderful gift from the heart of God.
This was certainly a clever way to contrast youth and old age. It did seem to spend a little too much time on the teen for a piece upon twilight years, although perhaps that wouldn't be the case if the first half were made clearer that this is a memory. Theme aside, my favourite line was "...happy, almost mischeivious...". It really brought that Mrs. Hammond was reliving the incident in dream rather than just remembering happy days.
Nice story, transitioning from the memory to the present was a little rough. Some kind of indication for the reader would be nice. Not clear what the story line had to do with topic. A person could have been in accident and be comatose and relive a favorite memory without being in their twilight years. Still good writing though.