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07/09/09
Many readers will be able to identify with this story and its message. This sweet story was right on topic and flowed nicely.
You hit the topic dead-on with your wonderful analogy--much to remember here.
07/09/09
I love the way you bridged across two generations to express their specific blend of anticipation and frustration. Well done
07/10/09
Really good and such a great message.
Wonderful title and I love the relationship and conversation between these two. I sometimes wish we could pull down the darkness too.
On topic and a very serene feel to the mc's period of life. The title/little girl's wish was cute.
07/11/09
a story that definitely tugs on the heart strings. I like the way that the little girl is oblivious to what is going through her grandmother's mind. This makes the contrast even more effective.
07/11/09
You're one great writer! Your title, your opening line, the development of your story, the dialogue of the two characters and your ending are things I hope to learn to apply in my own amateurish writing.

Besides all that, the story is touching and on target. Again, thanks for writing.