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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Twilight Years of Life (07/02/09)

TITLE: Fresh Bread and Meatloaf
By Leah Nichols
07/06/09


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5:31am
Day one. Investigation of Lollie Parker, age 91. Son concerned about recent behavior, worried about Alzheimer's. Not my favorite work, but with the economy the way it is, I'll take what I can get. He warned me she gets up early – I didn't realize HOW early. Guess I'll arrive by 4am tomorrow.

6:37am
What the heck is she doing? She hasn't moved for the last hour. Just sitting on the bed, reading a book, then looking up and talking out loud. I don't need the son's concerns to formulate my opinion at this point.

7:24am
Finally! She got up, showered, then headed to the kitchen. She took like a zillion pills, before grabbing flour and stuff to bake something. Who really starts baking at 7:30 in the morning? Other than bakeries, that is. My stomach is growling. Better find my cereal bar.

9:15am
The old lady is officially kooky. While her bread was baking (which does smell heavenly), she danced around her living room and sang for an hour. I AM NOT JOKING. The only old people I've known just sit around, doing crosswords or knitting. She has yet to pick up a needle. Now she's headed to her car. Time to follow her – what next?

12:03pm
She's back, making a sandwich with that fresh bread. I may rethink my opinion about early morning baking. I spent three hours following her around to essentially every thrift store in town. All she bought was kids' clothes. Granted, she only bought nice ones, maybe one or two per store, but that seriously took all morning!

2:24pm
She's been working in her garden for two hours, between washing and pressing those clothes. Got a little worried there a couple times when she glanced up. I know she can't see me through this hedge, but it is a bit nerve-wracking. Can't make out the words, but she's been talking and singing the entire time. If that's a sign of dementia, she just might qualify. I'll need a few more definite signs, though.

3:44pm
A young girl came over from across the street with her two kids – and I'm fairly certain it's not Mrs. Parker's grandkids. They sat, talking, in the kitchen for an hour or so, while she gave them all at least ten cookies apiece. Then she goes and gets all those clean new clothes, and gives them to the girl, who's sobbing and hugging and thanking her all at once. I take back my statement about her being kooky. I kind of wish I had a granny like her.

5:58pm
After they left, she went back to her bedroom for round two of this morning's action. She's back on her bed, reading and talking out loud again. For TWO HOURS. Maybe those twilight years aren't too bad, if you like reading and talking to yourself. She certainly does a lot of that.

8:29pm
For the record, no subject has ever discovered me. I began this career because I can be silent and still for hours. Secondly, I rarely have empathy for my subjects, which keeps me objective. Maybe the giving clothes to the kids thing broke me down today. But I still have no idea how she discovered me!

In the middle of making dinner, she stopped, walked out to the porch, and asked if the person that was observing her would like to eat dinner and “get the real inside scoop”. I almost laughed aloud. The old woman was persistent, though. She was out for twenty minutes. Finally I gave in, since she was so sure of it. But when I asked her if she had seen or heard me, she said no, “God told her”. Yikes.

I had a great meal of meatloaf and potatoes, even if I had to sit through her yakking about God this and God that. So I'm not very religious. Sheesh. I've been to church once or twice in my life. Just didn't figure people actually prayed all day, or did nice things for people without strings attached. Apparently she only recently started this – she went on about “getting saved” a few months back.

9:14pm
Rounding up my report for Mrs. Parker's son. She doesn't have dementia. She's just one of those religious nuts who likes to go around talking to God. Not my type of fun. She did invite me to come over again, however, for more food and conversation.

Maybe I'll think about it. It was pretty good meatloaf.


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Charla Diehl 07/09/09
I enjoyed the day I spent with your MC in her twilight years. Thanks for taking me along and showing God's love in action through this old lady.
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/09/09
Through your excellent description, a beautiful elderly Christian lady appeared. Good job of "showing" instead of "telling." (I'd love to have her energy--at any age.) The last sentence was an excellent conclusion.
Donna Emery07/09/09
Go, granny! Tell that spy about Jesus! A wonderful story about a really wonderful old lady! Nice work
Noel Mitaxa 07/09/09
It looks like the Hound of Heaven may tracking a private deFective! A good light touch on a potentially disturbing theme.
Laura Manley07/10/09
Very cleverly written! Your title brought me in, the content of the piece kept me here. In a quotation situation, the punctuation should be on the inside of the second quotes. This was a delight. Laura
Lynda Schultz 07/10/09
I hope I grow old this well.
Scarlett Farr 07/10/09
what a delightful story! Wish there were more little ladies like that in the world.
Patricia Turner07/10/09
What a great day! I love how you gradually revealed your MC's true self. I enjoyed every moment of the day, especially from dinner onward.
Patricia Herchenroether07/10/09
A truly wonderful story with a creative format. I loved that her "dementia" was unfounded. Never too late to accept Christ.
Gregory Kane07/11/09
What an amazing woman. Nicely told.
Mary McLeary07/11/09
Do you know my mother? The MC is an excellent example to every Christian. Good job.
Sonya Leigh07/14/09
Mmmmm. I'm a sucker for good meatloaf and potatoes...we love to roast potatoes at our house!

More than that, after reading about this grandma to everyone, I prayed that I would be like her one day--loving and giving and cooking lots to bless others who are in their busy time of life.

Great little story.
Shirley McClay 07/15/09
Awwww... I wanna be just like her! Excellent!
Jeanne E Webster 07/15/09
Loved it! You're a sweetie!
Bryan Ridenour07/15/09
Very good entry. Kept me interested all the way through. Well written. Well done.
Karlene Jacobsen 07/15/09
I liked the format for this piece. Very clever.