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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Twilight Years of Life (07/02/09)

TITLE: Where'd I Put My Teeth?
By Cindy White
07/05/09


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I used to lose my car keys,
But those they took from me,
When I failed to pass the eye test,
At the local DMV.

Now I've lost all definition,
ĎRound about my waist,
And since I lost my sense of smell,
Iíve lost my sense of taste.

Every time I shower now,
I lose some more gray hair.
I've lost all feeling in my legs,
Just sitting in my chair.

Hid deep behind these wrinkles,
I've lost my supple skin.
And when looking in the mirror,
It's not the same smooth grin.

My teeth have all abandoned me,
Where did I put those dentures?
Maybe by the box of photos,
Depicting my adventures.

I've lost my flexibility,
In my fingers, back and knees,
And I nearly lose ďcontrolĒ,
Each time I cough or sneeze.

My sense of humorís still intact,
The last thing that shall go,
If only I could hear the joke,
Itíd make me laugh I know.

Iíve lost too many loved ones,
Had my share of pain and sorrow,
But Iíll find my joy in heaven,
Where there lies a bright tomorrow.


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Jim McWhinnie 07/09/09
*chuckles*

Clever piece of writing ... and a good healthy attitude about the reality of passing years ...
Josiah Kane07/11/09
"My sense of humorís still intact" It certainly is. What a funny way to show a few of the losses of old age.

I do think that if you could've done so, you should have split your last verse into two developed verses. It plunged the humour into two serious concepts right at the end without quite doing justice to either. Perhaps another line about serious losses, and then something about NOT losing faith to start the last verse.

One thing this did do for me (apart from make me grin) was to put into perspective how much the little things youngsters take for granted have the power to make life much more worthwile.
Beth LaBuff 07/12/09
I totally ENJOYED this! Love your humor!
Charla Diehl 07/14/09
I'm always drawn to poetry and this was delightful. Your poem was filled with all the reasons older people really need to keep their sense of humor. And it ended on such a hopeful note for believers. Thanks for the smiles.
Judy Burford07/15/09
This poem is so very funny -- mostly because it's so true! I'm reading it to my Sunday School class this Sunday. They will love it.
Bryan Ridenour07/15/09
Very good poem with wonderful humor! Well done!