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07/09/09
What a wonderful lesson ... old folks are people too. Well-told and well-written.

I enjoyed this piece. It brought to life some memories of my own.
07/09/09
This was told with such realism and spark; " Oh dear, bread and beer" will be stuck in my mind all day now! (I think I've heard my mother mutter that a few times)
'Nursing home stories' can be tough to write about without falling into something that's been done before but you made this one twinkle! Love the expression about intense enough to spread on toast. Very well written.
07/10/09
This is full of life and realism. Well told, well written and enjoyable.
07/14/09
Your comment, "gag me with a spoon" took me back a few years! Very realistic view of a teen's POV to the sometimes startling realities of care home facilities, even in today's world. And, I hope we all empathize, because we are only a generation away for the possibility of it becoming our own realities! Good descriptive writing!
07/15/09
You did a wonderful job of showing your readers how sweetly a relationship can blossom under trying circumstances. I think the sweetness of your MC and the old woman would be enough to brighten any nursing home. Good job.