The Official Writing Challenge
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I believe after your introduction,I know those sisters, April, May, and June,eh?:-), and I loved June's surprise. I would enjoy reading more about them.
Shipboard romance, eh? I love to read April and May's reactions after they got over the initial shock. Love Bill's nonchalance.
The only problem with this is it ended! How I would love to be a fly on the wall to hear what May has to say.
A thoroughly delightful tale! I too would like to read the next installment in the sister's lives. :-)
More, please!
Bill wins my vote in this delightful study of contrasting characters. Nicely done.
You grabbed me with the first sentence and held me through to the delightful end. Like the others, a sequel is requested. Enjoyed this very much.
Sweet! Love the sisters names, love the shipboard-second-time-around at romance, love Bill! The waitress, the noise, all of it just perfectly described.
Good stories stand out from all others by the special attention to characters, names, places, timing, good subject matter AND that kiss of genius. This is such a story.
Loved the credible way you drew your characters, and the twist at the end. Yet it needs more than a sequel: it should be a "cereal" - followed by bacon with eggs over easy???:-)