The Official Writing Challenge
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06/11/09
This is so well written and has such a easy flow about it. I read it quickly, but thought it a long time.
06/14/09
A lot of wisdom here wrapped up in a very light-weight shell. I thought the explanations were perfectly suited to a child, and you avoided both making it too sentimental and too heavy.
06/15/09
This was a light hearted read with a message suited to children. I could see this as a Sunday School story. Good job.
06/15/09
A lot of sorrow here... but much hope, as well. You did a very good job of balancing the two! Well done.
You took a very deep subject and explained it simply and well. I loved the wisdom of Grandpa and the resiliency of the child.
Great story to explain life after death. Very sweet interaction between Grandfather and Grandchild. I could picture the whole scene in my mind. Well done.
06/15/09
First of all, I want to start with the ending. I like how you ended this on a light-hearted note after tackling a difficult subject for children. Also, the light-heartedness throughout the story helped balance the sorrow...such as the grandpa joining the girl on the ground. Well-written story!
06/15/09
Sweet. The relationship of grandpa to child is so rich. Each carrying burdens, both moving forward. Really enjoyed the voice of the piece.
Mona
Sherry, On at least 6 of the comments I tried to make today on various entries, the link would take me to the next one down from "leave a comment" which was about sending a private message. In each case, I tried and tried but couldn't get to leave a comment.
06/17/09
This was so sweet...I want to roll in the grass with them! Awesome story...
06/18/09
This is such a sweet, lovely piece, Shirley--absolutely my favorite kind of story!
07/01/10
Shirley, I'm going to feature this delightful story on the Front Page Showcase for the week of July 26. Look for it on the FaithWriters Home Page--and congratulations!
08/04/10
I already left a message when you first wrote this powerful story. Wanted to add a note of congratulations and recognition on this story. It is well-deserved.
This is wonderful! Well-written and thought-provoking. Congratulations!!