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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Empty and Full (06/04/09)

TITLE: Touch of Fragrance
By Pat Guy
06/10/09


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A name called,
familiar, loved,
spoken many years.
Echoes answer a dying heart.
At times,
a frightened heart.
Echoes…echoes…
Green walls have nothing to say and
monitors speak
a language of their own.

Tears silent.
No one knows
the ache that stretches
across the void of no return.
Only one
hears her fear.
Echoes…echoes…
Reverberate their pain.
Machines help her breathe.
In…out…
Love touches,
a hand, an arm, her brow.
Trembles ease in its embrace.
Fingers no longer grasp
its sunshine…
exuberant, flamboyant sunshine.

Remnants feed on the past and
nothing is left.
Letting go…
Tender words of
tears.
Tender words of
love.
Fade…
Fade…
Fade into…

Brilliance!
Rays and rays of brilliance!
Reaching forth unto the ends of the void.
Washing, healing,
breathing,
Light.
Deep, deep, breaths of
pure, sweet
Light.
Warm.

Fragrance Holy.
Twirling, swirling,
drawing her close, and
closer.
Soft upon her skin.
Dare she lift her hand?
Dare she lift both hands?
Oh!
The longing
to be in the arms
of the Light!

Her name called…
familiar, loved.

Surrender.

Healed.


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Sharon Kane06/14/09
Some very powerful imagery here.
Joanne Sher 06/14/09
Ooooh - beautiful imagery and what a powerful piece.
Carol Slider 06/15/09
A beautiful, intense depiction of hopelessness transformed into hope. Your imagery is very evocative!
Mariane Holbrook06/15/09
I believe I know for whom this was written, Pat. It's painfully descriptive yet tenderly applied. I know it must have been both difficult to write and yet comforting. Your big ole heart just opened up and gave us another glimpse inside. A lovely piece.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/15/09
In your beautiful poem, I see healing for your loved one and comfort for you. Very well done.
Rachel Rudd06/15/09
Beautiful! I think it DID work to break the rules...the way you wrote it fit the subject matter so well.
Chely Roach06/15/09
Wow, I thought this was lovely...well done!
Bryan Ridenour06/15/09
A beautiful look at hope in what many say is hopeless. Nicely done.
Diana Dart 06/18/09
Very, very nice. Emotional, triumphant, gripping. Well done, congrats on your placement!
Charla Diehl 06/23/09
I'm a bit late in reading the entries, but glad this was chosen as a stand out entry. In just a few words you said so much--A beautiful piece. Congratulations!
Jan Ackerson 02/28/10
Pat, I'm going to feature this beautiful poem in the Front Page Showcase for the week of March 8. Look for it on the FaithWriters Home Page--and congratulations!