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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Empty and Full (06/04/09)

TITLE: The Youngest, Greatest, Fairy Magician Warrior
By Jenny Litfin-Fulton
06/10/09


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~…The mighty Zoe approached the looming, ominous castle with a great sense of foreboding growing ever stronger in her spirit...~



“Oof! Zoe! Look out! You nearly ran right into me!”



~…Walking with a steady confidence, the youngest, greatest fairy magician warrior avoided every obstacle in her path. All too soon, she stood gazing up at the impossible iron gates through which she knew she must enter…~



“Move!”

“Hurry up, Zoe! You’re going to be late for class.”



~…Recognizing a new sense of urgency, the youngest, greatest fairy magician warrior uttered the magic words, opened the door, and ran at the speed of lightening to the room where the stern, demanding instructor of magicians resided – waiting as usual to reprimand and scold the youngest, greatest fairy magician at every possible opportunity…~



“Zoe Christine Allen! How many times do I have to tell you? Do NOT run in the hallways!”

“Sorry, Mrs. Alderson. I was just…”

“You were just what? Don’t you ever stop to think about what you’re doing? Now get to class – and try to put something in that head of yours by paying attention to what’s going on.”

“Yes, Mrs. Alderson.”



~…With a renewed – yet cautious – urgency, the youngest, greatest fairy magician warrior continued on at a fast pace, being careful not to run and once again bring down the wrath of the all-powerful Enforcer-of-all-things-within-the-realm-of-the-dark-castle. Success was within reach…and then rang the Bell-of-Doom, signaling the death of free-time to anyone not safely within the confines of their predetermined destinations…~



“Late again, Zoe? Don’t you ever think about what time it is? You know that I’ll have to take away five minutes of your recess time again. Maybe we can use that time to figure out a plan to get you to class on time. Now go put your things away. For the rest of you 5th graders…”



~…The youngest, greatest fairy magician warrior floated over to the coat closet, waved her magic wand, and watched her things fly tidily to their places in perfect order. She then floated back to her seat and gazed up at the daily math problems – her first challenge of the learning day, but one she could breeze through easily – a secret code she would use to unlock the secrets of the evil elf, Dargon and so save all the earth from the darkness of stupidity. With a confident smile, she…~



“Zoe! At least pick up your pencil, and try to do the problems. You should know how to do these problems – we’ve been talking about them for the last couple of days.”


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“Emily, I just don’t know what to do about that girl – it’s as though I try and I try to fill that head of hers, but nothing stays in there.”

“Don’t be discouraged, Nora. I know it’s difficult having Zoe in your class, but you have to realize that children learn at different speeds. Zoe may just be one of those who thinks and learns things at a slower rate.”

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~…The youngest, greatest fairy magician warrior intently studied the location and geography of each location on the map. When the evil elf, Dargon, attacked, she would be prepared with a brilliant defense, due to her superior knowledge of the land and people of that nation. Success was within sight as she picked up her pencil and began sketching out her highly-developed plans…~



“Zoe…!”


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Patricia Turner06/12/09
I can't help but love Zoe - what a great imagination, maybe too much so for her humdrum 5th grade world. Great writing!
Glynis Becker 06/13/09
A very enjoyable read!
Gregory Kane06/14/09
Clever and imaginative. I suspect that it would flow a little better if you could use some stronger formatting effects to highlight the fantasy sections. I appreciate that you have done this with the tilde but I only picked this up myself on my second read. Personally I would recommend use the Italics tag. But a fun story that certainly raised a smile
Lollie Hofer 06/16/09
This truly hits home as a teacher. It's true, each child has a God-given, unique way of learning. The challenge is trying to fit all their "uniquenesses" together. What a fun story. Your MC was delightful.
Diana Dart 06/17/09
So cute and a great concept. I stumbled over the flow between Zoe's inner and outer world, maybe some formatting changes as suggested would have been helpful. Really enjoyed this one!
Sara Harricharan 06/18/09
Awww! I loved Zoe! She was charming and delightful character and I felt sad that she wasn't fully "appreciated" for her uniqueness by the others. This was a neat story! Thanks for sharing and congrats on your highly commended! ^_^
Bryan Ridenour06/18/09
Great story...well written...congrats on your placement!
Jenny Litfin-Fulton 06/19/09
Thank you, everyone, for your feedback! I do have a question that I'll probably post on the message board as well -- umm...how do I get the italics? I originally wrote Zoe's thoughts in italics but then couldn't figure out how to get them to transfer to the format.
mick dawson07/02/09
This is the funniest entry I've seen since I joined FWs. I hope you churn out more of these.
Lyn Churchyard07/02/09
I can so relate to Zoe! I was exactly the same when I was at school. She's my kind of 5th grader. Well done on the Highly Commended!!
Jan Ackerson 08/20/09
Jenny, I'm going to feature this delightful story on the Front Page Showcase for the week of September 27. Look for it on the FaithWriters Home page...and congratulations!
Steve Webb09/28/09
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