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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Empty and Full (06/04/09)

TITLE: A Lake, Live Well, and Leaping Lunkers
By Bryan Ridenour


The boat throttled down to an idle. The no wake zone loomed and children splashed in the cordoned swim area. The able helmsman eased the boat into its slip, minimizing scrapes to the faithful vessel christened Glory Bound. The bleary-eyed fishermen looked forward to a hot meal, shower and a soft bed. The men wrestled disappointment; a long night on the lake and nothing in the live well was quite frustrating.

“Men,” ordered the captain, “grab th’ gear, stow it in th’ lockers, and grab some grub. Lord willin’ tonight will be better.”

The men scooped up poles, tackle boxes and life jackets; the captain jotted notes in his log.

“Hold it men!” a voice called cheerily.

The captain glanced up, seeing the marina’s manager smiling broadly, perched on a stool in the shade of the sheltered harbor.

“Hold what?” responded the captain, each man toting gear, ready to disembark.

“It’s time to go fishing,” he called.

“But we fished all night…no luck,” responded one of the capable anglers.

“That’s right,” agreed the captain. “We utilized fish finders, topographical maps, GPS…we fished the old honey holes and trolled a couple of new coves. We didn’t catch a thing.”

“Wait Cap’n,” interrupted one of the weary, “John snagged and wrestled with that shoe.”

The Captain smirked and several of the men chuckled at the reminder.

“You’ll catch more than shoes now…trust me,” urged the manager.

“Well…,” the Captain considered aloud. “Ok men, we’re going back out.”

The bedraggled men thumped back into seats, grumbling. A thermos of coffee made the rounds.

“We’re warn out Cap’n Pete,” one complained. “The fish aren’t biting.”

“The manager’s never given bad information before…have you sir?” he asked turning to face the marina’s operator.

The manager smiled, eyes twinkling joyfully.

“What do we do sir?” inquired the Captain, prepared to take notes.

“Take the boat out to these coordinates,” he instructed handing the Captain a slip of paper. “Drop anchor and open the live wells. Do nothing else.”

The Captain cranked the ignition and the motor coughed and sputtered to life. The fishermen squinted into the hot sun, bemoaning more time on the water. Each wondered how the manager could possibly know more than Captain Pete and the coordinates of where hungry fish schooled to boot.

“Can you believe it?” cried a burly man named John.

Fish of all sizes exploded to the top of the water and took flight, wriggling and flopping, diving into open live wells. The fisherman watched, eyes wide, mouths agape.

“Unbelievable!” exclaimed another, dunking out of the way of a large bass.

“Cap’n Pete,” called James, “how does the manager get his fishin’ tips?”

“Corporate,” answered the Captain, “He gets constant updates from Corporate.”

“Do y’ think he could give us the direct line?” asked Thaddeus, slamming shut a brimming live well.

“I’ve been told,” began Captain Pete, “that if you ask the manager for instructions on talkin’ to Corporate, he’ll give ‘em, and then you can talk to Corporate anytime you want.”

“Why don’t we just call’em on our own, if it’s that easy,” asked John.

“Because,” answered the captain,” we need the manager to help us begin the relationship. We can’t just be callin’ up corporate, asking things without a connection.”

The fishermen nodded as one, understanding.

“Well, men, the boat’s nearly swamped with fish,” announced a joyful captain. “Let’s get back to the marina, count the fish, thank the manager, and get connected.”

“Aye, aye, Cap’n,” the crew chorused.

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Beth LaBuff 06/12/09
I had to smile at "He gets constant updates from Corporate." (very clever…as is your whole modern-day Biblical fishing story). I like your message, "get connected." :)
Gregory Kane06/14/09
A catchy title that did not disappoint. I love your sheer creativity - very well done.
Betty Castleberry06/15/09
I love this. Creative comparison of how we reach the father. Well done.
Mona Purvis06/15/09
So glad I'm connected to corporate. This was such an easy read, knew where it was going and wanted to go along. Lovely.
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/15/09
You did a great job with this retelling--such vivid pictures and wonderful message. I enjoyed it very much.
Chely Roach06/15/09
Wow, this was a blast. What a great retelling with lots of modern twists. Great job!
Nancy Gustafson06/15/09
Good retelling of the "original" story. Enjoyed it.
Connie Dixon06/15/09
Loved Cap'n Pete. Great job on telling this familiar story. Creative and captivating.
Lollie Hofer06/15/09
I liked the modern twist on a well-loved and known Bible story. Gotta love the "corporate" connections as well. This was fun to read. Well done!
Patricia Herchenroether06/15/09
Great story-I too love to see how Bible stories ring true in these days. Thanx.
Mariane Holbrook 06/17/09
A very funny read! I loved it and the way you presented it! Kudos, big time!
Sonya Leigh06/17/09
Hey, Captain (of little guys)! What a terrific take here! I could really see the scene--the boat, the rough men, the captain writing in his log...good descriptions! Very well done.
Sara Harricharan 06/17/09
Oh, this is GOOD! I loved this modern take, what a way to really let this hit home. Great stuff, I loved the dialog and the way you made these characters literally leap to life. ^_^ LOL!
Pat Guy 06/17/09
I really enjoyed the voice you used here--the whole ambiance of the story and the dialog. Loved the modern take and loved the read. Well done Bryan.