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Memories are the fabric of our lives. Thanks for sharing.
06/12/09
Hauntingly beautiful! I find myself living this even today. The longing is powerful...and sweet...and sad...and promising. Loved this so very much.
Mona
06/12/09
Hauntingly beautiful! I find myself living this even today. The longing is powerful...and sweet...and sad...and promising. Loved this so very much.
Mona
06/14/09
What a lovely story, and so well written. Beautiful words put together skillfully. I really enjoyed this, thank you.
With wonderful imagery, you presented masterfully a picture of your memories. For me this piece is a "keeper."
06/15/09
Absolutely gorgeous. I loved the line, "Nothing left of those sprawling giants except their decaying stumps, as if tombstones for the now departed old men." Superb.
06/15/09
I enjoyed reading this, it's just lovely. Exquisite details...blue floral wallpaper...etc.

Here is a little observation. You use the word 'I' 34 times--20 times in that first paragraph. :)

Is there perhaps a different way to express yourself there?

Keep writing, Jim. Always a blessing to read your thoughts and reminisences.
06/15/09
Memories are a gift of the past and you described them so well. Wonderful visual descriptions here. I was right there with you, even to the disappointment. Good job!
06/15/09
I liked the phrase "a whole lot of empty." Good use of this week's theme. I want my husband to read this because it is reminescent of his childhood as well. He always loves talking about the ol' farm. Your descriptions were rich. Well done!
Loved your descriptions of the memories of old. Wonderful take on the topic. Nicely done.
This could have been for the Bitter and Sweet topic. hehe. Seriously, this was beautifully written and I feel the same longing, a sort of sadness when I think of my childhood days. Well done.
This was beautifully done and stirred up some precious memories for me. Don't worry about all the "I" references in your first paragraph. You could shorten it into two or three paragraphs and that wouldn't even be an issue. I loved this entry!
06/17/09
As usual, you have gentle, lovely descriptions in your writing, Jim. I really enjoyed this walk down memory lane.

I'm thinking you must have some excellent, specific memories on that farm...would love to see some of those in a plot-structured story sometime.

It's exciting to even think about how great a story any of those memories would make--written in your style and by your hand, of course! You have a rich way with words. Good job! Again.
06/17/09
Loved going down that dusty half-mile trip with you. Great descriptions, kind of a melancholy feel. I liked it.