The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
You third paragraph is outstanding!

This is moody and well-written. Superb example of a slice-of-life.
06/03/09
This is good solid substantial and varied writing. Thanks for showing us your talent.

Colin
06/03/09
Your words are so fluid and poetic! Very rhythmic flowing piece with great deascriptions. I felt like I was watching the M.C.in the same room. Well done!I like this alot.
06/03/09
I could feel the heaviness and despondency in that room where the MC worked. You have the ability to bring what you're describing to life, such strong imagery.
06/03/09
Poor Adrian, going through a full day without sun and the outdoors. I know people live like your very accurate descriptions, but I thank God I'm not one of them. Well written.
06/03/09
I like this! There is such "atmosphere"in your excellent descriptions, attention to detail, and careful characterization of your MC. I felt I had a front-row seat as I watched his day unfold. Great writing! :)
06/03/09
This was oh-so-rich in atmosphere...I felt the strain of the MC's workload and exhaustion. Excellent stuff.