The Official Writing Challenge
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05/28/09
Good use of the topic words.

The narrative style here made me feel a bit distant from the couple, as if I were observing them from far away. Maybe some more dialogue, or sensory details?

I liked the fact that the fender bender wasjust a 'blip' allowing the light to shine brighter.
06/03/09
Good story. Could have been more dialogue. Thank you.