The Official Writing Challenge
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Very good! Wonderful imagery, and a fabulous contrast between the two parts of the poem.

A few possessive words in the first half were lacking their apostrophes. I'm curious, too, why you chose to close with the "Fumes" rather than the "Rooms".

I enjoyed this poem very much.
The flow and pace of this poem was smooth. The contrast of light and dark was vivid. The last two lines of the poem are hauntingly powerful. Well dome!
Great poetic writing. This was an enjoyable read. Well done!
I enjoyed the message and well-written contrasts. Thanks for writing.