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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)

TITLE: You Call This Dark?
By Allison Egley
05/27/09


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Camp Cloverpoint Theme Verse:
Let your light so shine before men, that they may see your good works and glorify your Father in heaven.
Matthew 5:16 (NKJV)




The boys sat huddled together in a small recess of the cave.

"Man," Matt said, shivering. It's so dark in here. It's almost like the darkness is penetrating my skin."

"Not possible," Eric stated.

"What do you mean?"

"Well, technically, scientifically speaking, there is no such thing as darkness."

"Then what do you call this, Einstein?"

"I'll admit, it is dark in here," Eric said

"Ha! You just admitted it. There is such a thing as darkness."

"Wrong, my friend."

"But you just...."

"I said 'there is no such thing as darkness.' Darkness is not a thing. It's not made of matter, or waves, or anything else measurable by scientific instruments."

"Iím not sure I understand," Matt said.

"Well, you see, darkness is simply the absence of light. We can measure light with all sorts of instruments, and there are even different types of light. But we can't measure darkness." Eric looked around the cave. "You see those eyes glowing over there?"

"Yeah."

"That's proof that there is at least some light in here, even if we can't see it in the traditional sense. If there were no light in here, that animal's eyes would have nothing to reflect off of. Our pupils see by light, and if there were absolute darkness, we couldn't see those eye glowing. We couldn't see anything. We can't even imagine that sort of darkness."

"Wow. That's pretty amazing. Sometimes it's not so bad having a geek for a friend."

"Um.... thanks, I think," Eric replied uncertainly.

"So, what do you say, old buddy, old pal? Shall we get out of here before those blood-sucking bats find us?"

"Blood-sucking... bats don't...."

"It's a joke, Eric. I know there aren't any blood-sucking bats. Well, at least not in here."

"Sure. Let's go."

"You know," Eric said, "There are other things like light and dark."

"Really?"

"Yep. Cold is just the absence of heat, and quiet is just the absence of sound, and light is the absence of weight... actually it's a lack of matter, technically speaking, and...."

"Okay," Matt interrupted. "I think that's enough science for the day. Let's go."

The boys flipped on their headlamps, whistling as they started out to the front of the cave.

"Last one out is a blood-sucking bat," Matt yelled, sprinting towards the camp.

"It won't be me," Eric said, chasing after his friend. With a great leap and a Tarzan yell, Eric landed on Matt, sending them both tumbling back into the cave, their helmets flying off their heads.

"Hey look," Matt said, "There's an astonishing lack of light in here. And heat, and..."

"Do me a favor, Matt. Shut your mouth and give us a lack of sound."

The boys wrestled a bit, then climbed out of the cave and headed back to their cabin. They both sighed contently.

"Summer camp is the best," Matt stated.

"Yep. You said it friend; you said it."


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Catrina Bradley 05/28/09
A fun, lighthearted AND educational romp. I enjoyed this! (I'm wondering if a kid would use the word "penetrating" tho.)
Laury Hubrich 05/29/09
Everyone needs a geeky friend to keep us in line. How funny. Very clever story.
Janice Fitzpatrick06/03/09
I like the playfulness and friendship shown here. Nice job! Pretty believable dialogue, other than penetrating, although if Matt is hanging with his bud, Eirc long enough, Eric's smarts and language could easilty rub off in time. So, maybe he would use this. In any event I think this was cute and I enjoyed it!
Colin Swann06/03/09
Wow! I absolutely enjoyed this, I love your style of writing!

Thanks - Colin
Jan Ackerson 06/03/09
I loved the final comment about the "lack of sound". I kept waiting for them to go "hey wait, there are EYES glowing in here!"
Sara Harricharan 06/03/09
Heehee! Love those two! The humor was nicely done and not forced at all, making for a good giggle at the end. Nicely done!
Patricia Herchenroether06/03/09
I loved the interplay between these two friends and totally believable. Really cute.
Lollie Hofer 06/03/09
I have read LOTS of stories this week (and I do mean LOTS and I'm not even a judge). Your story is waaaaay at the top of my list of favorites. I sure would have loved to know what animal's eyes were glowing, but even that was part of the intrigue. This was a funny, fun read.