The Official Writing Challenge
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05/29/09
This is totally lovely. I hope the judges recognize the excellence here!
05/29/09
The prose in this piece is sooooooo poetic. You make a walk in the part romanticly (sp?)delicious. Your descriptions were rich. Thanks for sharing this lovely piece.
05/29/09
Sweet and refreshing! Thanks for the message of simple love and memories.
06/02/09
This is a great way of encouraging our "silver" wed couples to keep their love for each other alive. It's refreshing. Thanks.
06/02/09
I just love this so much. So real, private, sweet, descriptive. All about the relationship. My favorite this week.
Mona
06/03/09
So sweet and beautiful. I love the softness of it and I suspect heaven will be a bit like this :) Great entry.
A lovely, sweet entry. You transformed a simple walk into a thing of great beauty. Thank you.
Such a tender and intimate piece, not in a sensual sense but with beautiful words and memories. Such a stroll would leave me wanting to walk this pathway to eternity...what a enrapturing piece hon. Lord bless your talent.
06/03/09
Wow! Yes, they are some really beautiful descriptions here that just place this poetic prose in the excellent class. Wonderfully done!
I love the celebration of love after 25 years. My husband and I are going on 9 years this summer and we love each other more now than we did when we were first married. God is good!
06/03/09
Ooohhhh! Lovely and romantic! I liked the last line best of all the descriptions of thier outfits, this had a dreamy sort of storytelling feel to it. wonderful!
06/03/09
Very gentle, very lovely... I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks so much for sharing this beautiful and personal story!
06/03/09
A good romance. The sort of romantic stroll we like to remember. Very enjoyable. Colin
06/03/09
I'm back to say again how truly wonderful this piece is. I wanted to read and savor again. Unbelievable, your writing style and voice.
Mona
06/03/09
A very calming piece, filled with peaceful love.

A hint: Try to avoid beginning sentence with "There". It's not technically incorrect, but causes you to add extra, unnecessary words, and your sentences are stronger if they are reworded - for instance in your second paragraph, "Oh, an owl kept watch" - your noun is now "owl" and "A band of raccoons scoured.." Your noun is now "band" instead of "there".

Nitpicking aside, I absolutely loved this stroll. Nice. :D
07/19/09
What a gorgeous piece of writing I have stumbled upon here. This was so real, so warm; as cozy and comfy as her heather grey sweater. Loved it...