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Lovely-thank you for your thoughtful piece. Glad the chain was broken; it doesn't always happen that way.
05/29/09
Oh, how sad, and written with such honesty!

The only thing I wasn't clear on was the relationship between the narrator and Carolyn. I'll have to go back for a second read and see if I can pick it up.

Love the ending, with the narrator's precious daughter.
How touching and sad. Lovely piece. I liked the narrator's voice and how the adult was in some ways a child, still hurting and vulnerable. Good job!!
06/02/09
I like how you ended this sad story...that indeed the cycle was broken. I also liked your illustration for the word "void" in describing the mother-daughter relationship.

06/03/09
An emotive piece, written sensitively - very well done!!

Colin
06/03/09
very very sad, especially since this does not appear (to me at least) to be a fictional character. You really brought the bleakness of the relationship to life.
06/03/09
Very well-told story! Your gifted use of words captured the pain of the woman (and the little girl within) so perfectly. My favorite paragraph was this:

"There are many four-letter words wielding power; love is one, hate is another, but the word I use to describe this mother-daughter relationship is void. Like a voided check, never to be used, never to be cashed. Unfilled...invalid...empty...nothingness."

Excellent job! :)

06/03/09
It's amazing that you could be so close to this topic and write it so objectively and beautifully. I agree with the other comment that I am glad to see that the chain has been broken! All God's best to you!
06/03/09
so very sad, but really well written. Nice touch with how the title fits in with the story. Thanks for sharing this.
06/03/09
The image of the little girl she carries around is SO good. I like that you didn't give this a happy ending with the estranged mother-daughter; makes it very real. Great job wringing emotional reaction from this reader. GREAT job!
06/03/09
A piece that stirs the heart to demonstrate God's overwhelming love within, flooding and overflowing to heal the hurt and remove the hate. It is a treasure well expressed we share in Jesus.
06/03/09
Wow, this was so raw; so real. Excellent.
Excellent writing. Moving, touching, raw, evoking emotion in the depths of my own heart.