The Official Writing Challenge
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Ooh, this is good..kept me tense to the end. Perfect for the topic, and a creative take.
whoops-forgot to say that the title is too boring for this good entry. lol
05/29/09
Very intriguing setting and characters...I had the feeling there was a back story here that I didn't know.

A grammar note: When addressing a person, use a comma before their name. Joe, please hand me the remote. And a question--this didn't seem to be 'our' world, yet they had our Bible? That confused me.

Pieces like this would be gobbled up enthusiastically by the YA audience.