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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)

TITLE: Words from “The Delight of Your Eyes”
By Melanie Kerr
05/21/09


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Just as His word was given to you
He also spoke to me
I must confess, the purpose of
His plan is hard to see

To take away your eyes’ delight
To strike a mortal blow
To lead me down a different path
A road you cannot go

I think I have the better part
My grief I could not hide
I could not keep my bitter tears
Locked away inside

To not lament, or gently weep
It is too much to ask
Can any man, the Lord has charged
Be ready for this task?

My pride would wish a tear shed
A loud and mournful cry
A shout to mark my passing not
A soft and private sigh

Your road ahead may often be
A dark and brooding place
With moments when you can’t recall
The contours of my face

I leave my laughter in your heart
My smile to lift your way
My presence walking by your side
In each and every day

I have to boast that I will see
What only you can dream
And dance beneath His radiant light
The King who reigns supreme



Inspired by Ezekiel 24:15-18


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Lynda Schultz 05/28/09
When I read the reference, I went back and read the poem again. It was good the first time, even better the second. Well done.
Mona Purvis05/29/09
This is just lovely. I, too, went back and read the passage. What a brilliant take on the story, you made me see it anew.
Mona
Janice Fitzpatrick05/29/09
Such a flowing of lines. Beautiful. Good meter and rhythm. Lovely piece!!God bless!!
Dolores Stohler05/30/09
Absolutely lovely: flows smoothly and full of beautiful thoughts. Well done.
Lollie Hofer 05/31/09
I also enjoyed it the first time, but even more so after I read the scripture reference. What a wonderful use of this week's topic. Well done!
Jan Ackerson 06/02/09
Excellent--I'd love to see this in a memorial service rather than some of the icky poetry I've heard there. This is top-notch, and such a unique perspective!
Phyllis Inniss 06/03/09
A most interesting poem, giving delight not only to the eyes but to the mind. How well you conveyed the message of Scripture in your poem.
Sara Harricharan 06/03/09
Great lines in the last verse. I love it. Nicely done!
Colin Swann06/03/09
Excellent. Loved this and the truth it conveys. Thanks - Colin
Patricia Herchenroether06/03/09
It is definitely better each time I read it. This would be perfect printed on a funeral service leaflet. Nicely done!