The Official Writing Challenge
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05/26/09
You captured the emotions of the people by the Red Sea, that's for sure!
I can't help feeling you stopped too soon, and would have done better to have got them through the Red Sea. Leaving them trapped made for a sense of incompleteness.
You did a good job of showing how awful the slavery years were.