The Official Writing Challenge
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05/23/09
wow, some memorable images here--"liquid shame", "suicide circling like vultures"

Guilt is a motivator for change and transformation. Thank goodness this main character had a pastor who understood that so well and was willing to be the shepherd.
There's such a contrast in the "before" and "after" of your story, surely a story of warning for young people, wanting to try alcohol. I liked the forgiveness brought out by the minister.
Wow-this one hit me like a bullet between the eyes. Might be because "but for the grace of God go I."
Your story impacted me more than any other this week. Thank you for a reminder of who I was "before."
05/25/09
Yes, this could be used for the youth - it could help someone who's been through the heartache of a bad decision. God is so gracious He even helps us when we do stupid, consequential things. Great story Debs!
05/25/09
When we are young we believe we are immortal. You captured that belief then showed the truth of our fragile lives. I like the pastor, a true man of God not to condemn.
05/25/09
What a sobering, well-written story! You have such an awesome command of words, and your descriptions are excellent! I could picture the train looking like a film strip, "screeching, and spewing light from headlamps"!

Good message, gifted writing, great story!

05/25/09
I have a grandson who just started driving and 2 more soon to start. This is a real fear.
You told the harsh truth and ended with hope and forgiveness.
Mona
05/26/09
I loved the imagery in the opening line. The scenario was painfully true to life, and yet the hope of redemption shone through in the end. Excellent writing.
05/28/09
Wow! This is just beyond excellent. I really liked the pastor's way of reaching out to this boy. Congratulations on the win!
05/28/09
Magnificent!!! Congrats on your EC!!!
Debbie, I love the message you presented here. It is something so many in despair need to hear over and over again. I'm so glad this placed so highly in the EC - it is so well-deserved!
05/28/09
Oh, Debbie! You did a good job in this story of capturing the before and after. In the midst of the despair, I loved your glimmer of hope. Congratulations on your well-deserved honor.
05/28/09
WOW! This was packed with emotions, regrets and so glad it ended with that ray of hope we all need in desperate times. Gripping and powerful--something all teens should read. Congrats on your win.
06/01/09
B-lated congratulations on your EC this week, Debbie! Nice job.