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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Before and After (05/14/09)

TITLE: Before I Go After You


Shov’lers of wet sand
hair twisted, then fanned
salt and seaweed strands.

But before I go after you,
my mermaid, love-fated
and promises ensue,
kindergarten must be subjugated.

Rollers of newspapers
tossed in dawn vapors
entrepreneurial capers.

But before I go after you,
my helper, hair braided
and promises ensue,
banana seats should be upgraded.

Players of tennis,
height and finesse
curves in white dress.

But before I go after you,
my partner, on fire
and promises ensue,
a growth spurt, I’m praying, transpires.

Graduators of schools,
idealistic young fools
tiger by the tail rules.

But before I go after you,
my scholar, thoughts rounded
and promises ensue,
insurance (and job) should be grounded.

Writers of email
distant love, frailer
text messages trail her.

But before I go after you,
my pen pal, love dangled
and promises ensue,
a transfer has need to be wrangled.

Tempestuous breezes
feelings in pieces
frustration increases
his collar, she seizes.

Come after me now, before
love dies unredeemed—
Pen pal

Come after me now!

While the world stands before us
joyful, not laborious
in Him, existence glorious.

Speakers of vows,
rings all around,
to wind, caution’s bound.

My wife, my love,

Before and after annihilated,
our destiny, hereby, conjugated
eternity, through faith, consecrated.


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Loren T. Lowery05/21/09
I'm not the best in understanding poetry, but the phrasing and cadence intrigued me to read; and I'll offer what I saw - right or wrong. Childhood sweethearts following love's destiny. At times because of comfortable familiarity or simple distractions, one or the other must stop and say, "Hello, remember me? Remember us?"
And then, the journey resumes to end as the last stanza would have it to be - love blessed and ordained.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/23/09
Enigmatically told, yet clearly beautiful.
Charla Diehl 05/23/09
Poetry at its best from start to end. Loved the imagery of the playmates, classmates and finally lifemates. I'll be looking for this in the top ten list.
Patricia Herchenroether05/24/09
I'm terrible at understanding poetry, but after reading it several times, I finally got the basics. Mile-high writing!
Bryan Ridenour05/25/09
Beautiful story of destined love...Beautifully written
Jim McWhinnie 05/25/09
Lovely dance through a lifetime of love.
Joy Faire Stewart05/25/09
As always, your creative writing amazes me, poetry, stories...it doesn't matter. Excellent!
Pat Guy 05/25/09
An absolutely beautiful dance of words and story. The POV shift tripped me a little but I love the desire to reread a piece that gives me more each time I read it. No need for depression on this one. Bi-Polarly yours, Pat : )
Mona Purvis05/25/09
I read this a couple days ago. Then I read it again before I picked up all its essence and fullness.
It is wonderful! Truly a winner!

Carol Slider 05/25/09
Your writing always amazes me, and this is certainly no exception! How easy it is to get caught up in the mundane details of living! Absolutely lovely, evocative poetry.
Chely Roach05/25/09
This was so lovely...
Absolutely wonderful.
Myrna Noyes05/25/09
Wow! You have the heart of a poet, too! :)

This was beautiful, clever, romantic, and "rich"!

I am impressed! :)
Emily Gibson05/25/09
This is masterfully done and I want to hear the real life story behind it!
Lyn Churchyard05/26/09
What is the old saying, "A man chases a woman until she catches him"? Far, far too simplistic for this amazing piece. I am probably the worst one to comment on poetry, but this was richly visual.

It was like one of those misty scenes from a movie, where the MC's thoughts ebb and flow from one memory to another. I read it a second, and then a third time and enjoyed it more each time.

My mind boggles at the creativity of those who write poetry so well.
Betty Castleberry05/26/09
I love the stages of attraction and love portrayed here.

This is excellent.
Sara Harricharan 05/27/09
LOL! What a fun read. I liked the mermaid bit and especially the verse with "penpal" that word stuck with me, because it is so amazing to know the relationships that come out of something as simple as letters between two individual people. ^_^ Interesting read!
Gerald Shuler 05/27/09
Life, three lines at a time... wonderful poetry. I love reading poetry when it's really written by a poet. You are a poet.
Kristen Hester05/28/09
I read this yesterday, but TODAY it is all very clear...and beautiful! You have such talent!

Eliza Evans 05/28/09
Just WONDERFUL! So "out of the box" creative, Lisa.

I really admire how you push/challenge yourself, week after week after week.

High Five, Girl! :)