The Official Writing Challenge
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This is sooo good! I like your style and cleverness. Your humor and descriptions are so right on. Great job!!
05/23/09
This represents all those "before" and "after" ads on weight loss miracles.

The internal struggles are still the same, no matter what the external frame is supporting. You have shown a profound truth here.

(now to go shed a few myself...)
Your story's "fats and thins" kept me interested to the end. I liked the MC's character growth.
Very creative take on a well-used subject. Kept my interest from start to finish.
05/25/09
Superb characterization and what a great message woven in. A great piece.