The Official Writing Challenge
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05/23/09
What a powerful message you packed into such few words. Your poem flowed beautifully in rhyme and meter. I really enjoyed this one. My only suggestion would be to put spaces between the verses.
Oh, this is very good! I liked the meter and rythym and the message is right on. All of us can relate to this piece.Well done. Thx for writing this!!:0)
05/24/09
A person's life told in one short poem - very touching, very creative and extremely well done. I loved it! One suggestion I might have, would be to cut it down into four-liners instead of all in one. Just a thought...but AOK as is.
05/26/09
A lovely reminder that God looks on the heart; and that He alone has the power to change what lies there. Nice.