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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Good and Bad (05/07/09)

TITLE: Squirrel Tale
By Pamela Kliewer
05/13/09


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“Mommy, Mommy!”

“Goodness, dear, what is it? I’m right here.” Said Mrs. Squirrel.

“I was digging in that potted plant outside and that bad lady came running out of her house and yelled at me! When I ran into our hole she took her garden hose and ran water down it!”

“Penelope! How many times have I told you not to dig in people’s potted plants? They get very angry with us when we eat the bulbs out of their yards.”

“But, Mommy…”

“No buts, young squirrely. How many times do I have to tell you? If you keep damaging her property she might hurt you someday?”

“I know! She almost drowneded me today!” Penelope said as she swiped a paw at her teary eyes.

“Penelope you must be a good squirrel and only dig where I’ve told you you can. No more digging that nice lady’s crocus bulbs up.”

“Awww, Mommy! You’re no fun! Crocus bulbs taste so yummy! They’re my favorite food in all the whole world.”

“I know dear, but really…”

“Hey Ma! Look what I got! This stuff from inside that lady’s porch swing seats will be great for our nest this year, don’t you think?”

She turned and looked as her husband came through the side hole. Her eyes widened with delight. “Oh, George, that will be perfect. Just think how soft and warm it will be on cold winter nights…”

“Mommy! How come it’s okay for you and Daddy to do stuff like that, but I can’t have my favorite food in all the whole world?”

A mischievous gleam came into Mommy’s eyes. “Dear, you go right ahead and dig up all the crocus bulbs you want. We’re squirrels, after all. We have never been seen as good creatures. If that bad lady yells at you again you just go right ahead and do all the damage you want to her yard.”

Daddy, Mommy and Daughter all grinned, their large bushy tails swishing back and forth as they romped around with glee.



Author’s note: comic relief for a real life situation of dealing with squirrels in my own back yard.


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Beth LaBuff 05/16/09
This must have been therapeutic to write. :) What fun! Hope you can solve your squirrel problem. :)
Marilyn Schnepp 05/16/09
Yes Indeed! The Good and the Bad about God's furry little creatures. I, myself, love to watch them play in the oak tree outside my window...but then I don't have any potted plants, either. (*.*) The story is unique, creative and well written. I actually enjoyed it - even IF they're a thorn in the side of some. Nice entry.
Catrina Bradley 05/17/09
This reminds me of one of my favorite childhood stories - Peter Rabbit. I can't say I'm too keen on the sudden change in Mommy's attitude - a little too sudden for me. But hey, they're squirrels! I enjoyed the conversation. Very fast paced and a fun read.
Mona Purvis05/18/09
I've just been watching a squirrel steal the birdseed from the feeder in the backyard.
What this story shows is attitude! They do seem to have a certain attitude and you captured it.
Mona
Betty Castleberry05/18/09
Oh, I know how mad you can get at critters who dig up your bulbs. Been there, done that.

This was cute, and good for a smile this morning.
Gregory Kane05/18/09
Highly creative - rodents with tails and attitude. Maybe I've watched Alvin and the Chipmunks one time too many...
I also found the transition between good and bad a little too abrupt. Perhaps what might have helped would have been an action scene right at the end to show the contrast from the other point of view?
Gerald Shuler 05/18/09
Delightful little story. I agree that the good/bad switch was a bit too abrupt but it didn't take away from the story's charm. Well done.
Seema Bagai 05/18/09
Cute story. I agree with the others' comments about the shift in good/bad. Otherwise, this is good. I'm glad to see you growing in your writing. :-)
Colin Swann05/19/09
Enjoyed this cutely amusing story, although squirrels are down on my like list at the moment - robbed my blackbird's nest in the garden - the blackbird looked devasted. But they are cute to look at. Thanks for the tail of the tale (or is it the other way round?)
Colin
Connie Dixon05/20/09
This is hilarious. My mom is always complaining about the squirrels in her yard and I just don't get it. I think they're so cute. I guess she's not the only one that hates them. Very creative and fun story.
Patricia Herchenroether05/20/09
A fun read-I've got red squirrels creating havoc in my roof, gray squirrels robbing the bird feeders and flying squirrels thumping onto the house all night, but you know what? They're all cute! I'll bet they all think like your characters too!


   
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