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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Good and Bad (05/07/09)

TITLE: Good News: I Have Bad Credit!
By Patricia Herchenroether


The wish list seemed a mile-long bridge
and speed bumps crossed the span.
A magnet pinned it to the fridge,
my crinkled, yellowed plan.

For several years now, “new pc”
glared unchecked at my face,
while “water heater,” “roof repairs,”
and “house paint” took first place.

My ancient Gateway chilled and froze,
a ghost cat killed my mouse.
The audio and vids played out;
both cards lost to the House.

My ‘hertz” were hurting, megs were few,
the RAM had run away.
But things were looking great, because…
THE CHECK had come that day!

I sped with my annuity
to First Bank of Fort Knox,
and slid into a parking space,
while grinning like a fox.

The bank employee was real nice,
but “Bad news,” I was told,
“because this check’s from out-of-state,
it’s put five days on hold.”

Five days! My padlocked brain rebelled,
how can I wait that long?
(My logic left, was on the lam-
my think-tank had gone wrong).

When I ignored The Still, Small Voice,
which said, “Please wait, my child,”
I let the Demon enter in
to rampage and go wild.

Then off to “PC Pops,” I flew,
the Tempter had my ear:
“There’s always a Deferral Plan;
no payments for a year!

Inside the store I chose a jewel
(sky blue and silver-clad).
But when the salesman checked, he said,
“No good, your credit’s bad!”

Discouraged, I felt anger flare
because I failed my quest;
and bitter when The Father said,
“Trust me, it’s for the best.”

Oh well, next week, that yearly check
would magically turn green.
So in my sleep I still dreamed of
my shiny, new machine.

Then Nature chose to do her worst
and lightening struck a pine.
The tree fell on a power pole
which hit a feeder line.

My kitchen’s death by surgicide
would eat up all my cash.
The microwave, and side-by-side,
plus toaster all in ash.

But in the bank, my Rescuer
had kept my lifeboat tied.
I’ll try to listen better, Lord,
my Savior, Friend, and Guide.

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Bryan Ridenour05/14/09
Very nice poem...I love how God always knows best.
Lollie Hofer 05/15/09
Boy, could I relate...I despise the word "wait", and yet, when I listen to that voice it has never steered me wrong. Thanks for sharing this great poem. Your meter and rhyme were well done.
Gregory Kane05/17/09
Great fun with a timely message and a great rhythm. I particularly enjoyed the lines that said, "a ghost cat killed my mouse...My ‘hertz” were hurting, megs were few,
the RAM had run away." Exquisite
Mona Purvis05/18/09
Ooh, just lots of laughs. With a message. Loved it alot. Playful and yet...
Catrina Bradley 05/20/09
Such clever word choices! Rhyme and rhythm is top noch, and the story your poem told is engaging, with bits of humor and a wonderful message.
Glynis Becker05/21/09
Great poem! Lots of real world truth and wonderful wordplay besides.
Karlene Jacobsen06/03/09
I read in Genesis how God prevented a pharoah from sinning as he took Sarah to be his wife. This is a great illustration of how He still keeps us from sinning in spite of ourselves. Nice job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/27/10
I absolutely loved this. You are so hysterical. After reading your entry this week I was reminded how good you are. I've missed reading your work and was delighted to see another piece so I thought I'd go back and read some of your articles before my time. I hope you don't ever take that long of a vacation again, your work is great and should be shared!!