The Official Writing Challenge
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What an exciting read! I was pulling for her, and was thrilled with her recovery. Wonderful story telling.
Wow, I got all tensed up reading this. Realized I was holding my breath at the end!
Nice tension and suspense here. I found myself wanting to hurry things along.
I also wanted to hit the teenage daughter over the head with the phone even though she didn't realise what was going on (poor girl).

Being an asthma sufferer, I understand the feelings of fear when you can't breathe.
I remember having asthma attacks where panic set in as I fought for air. You painted this scene well.

05/14/09
Well done on making the top 15. And welcome back!
Welcome back. brilliant read. Really enjoyed it. Congratson making the top 15.lol Norms
05/25/09
Good interesting read. Welcome back!

Colin