The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/09
Love the lesson here and Erica's nickname of "little missy" It fits her sooo well and I love her dialog it is true and authentic! Excellent story you have here!
05/09/09
Clever title. :)
I want an Auntie Jean!
Had to chuckle at-
“Somethin’ else on your mind?"

"No. ...Just these 10 things..." :)

Love the voices here...both distinct and on pitch.

Beautiful, memorable message.

05/09/09
I never turn my needlework over to admire the messy side-but I will think of it in a new way since reading your story. Everyone should have an Auntie Jean. Thumbs up on this one.
05/11/09
Awww, this is a sweet little gem of a story...
I loved the MC, and her tender wisdom to her niece. I could just see her looking over her granny style glasses and hoop at her "little missy".
Very well done!
Excellently written story with a wonderful analogy for a message.
Such a sweet story. I'm so glad Ericka has such a wonderful aunt. Good writing. Great pace and flow. Good descriptions of Ericka as she sat on the floor. I could picture her.
05/11/09
Loved being drawn into this story and "visiting" with the characters. I want a wise aunt like her.
Mona
You created good depth of character in not many words.

This is a sweet story and a good read. Kudos!
Nice writing and a great message. Well done.
05/12/09
Hmm, yes, all the knots, and threads in what appears to be a messy jumble, going every which way, unable to tell what the pattern is. Much like my life.
05/12/09
Very good characterization and message. Thanks!
I felt like this story built up to an excellent ending. At first, I wasn't sure where the story was headed, but as it progressed, I started to see the tie in with the needlepoint and with the girl and her aunt. I love the lesson that Auntie Jean teaches at the end. A great way to end this cute story. :)
05/12/09
Very sweet. I love the characters and their interaction. Auntie Jean is a treasure! Great lesson, here, too. Very nice!
Very nice story and a good lesson too. I don't want an aunt like that-I want to BE an aunt like that! Blessings.
05/13/09
This is sweet. Love the message and the MC. Love you you weaved life into your embroidery work. Great take on the topic.