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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: My Mom, the Dorkasaurus
By Donna Emery
05/06/09


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“Mom, I need new clothes”

“What about all those clothes in your closet?”

“Honestly, Mom! They’re all out.”

“Out?”

“Yes, all of them are out. I need stuff that’s in.”

“Why?”

“Well, you don’t want me to be out, do you?”

“Perish the thought.”

“Mom, you don’t understand. You’re such a dorkasaurus. You dress like it’s the Middle Ages. Being in is what it’s all about.”

“Well, that may be, but you have a closet full of perfectly good clothes and I have a pile of bills to pay, so I don’t see me shelling out money for new clothes.”

“So I have to be out?”

“I’m afraid so, unless you want to get a job to pay for your new clothes.”

“Getting a job is out.”

“It’s out? Well, I have a job – so I must be out.”

“Well, of course you’re out. You’re a parent.”

“And parents are automatically out?”

“Totally.”

“No parent is ever in?”

“Puh-leez.”

“OK, so I’m out. But why are jobs out?”

“Well, for one thing, it would take all my free time. If I had no free time, I wouldn’t be able to hang out with my friends or have any fun. So, even if I got enough to buy new clothes, I couldn’t wear them anywhere. So, why bother?”

“Why bother, indeed?”

“Yeah, well, Mom… isn’t there anything you can do? My clothes are hopeless.”

“They weren’t hopeless two months ago, when you begged me to get those new ones for you.”

“Well, of course not. They were in, then.”

“So how can they be out already?”

“I don’t know. They just are. You just don’t get it.”

“I guess not. Well, I’m sorry, kid. You’re just going to have to soldier on with your out clothes. Just think: at this rate, in a few months, they’ll even be retro.”

“Oh, Mom, you’re hopeless. I’m in for such a tough time with these clothes”

“I know you; you’ll figure something out.”

“Like what?”

“Well, you’re popular. Wear those out clothes proudly and I’ll bet the other kids will think they’re in, again.”

“Well, it’s worth a try. I guess robbing a bank is out.”

“Not unless you want to end up in jail. Think of what you’d be wearing then.”

“Ugh. No way. Black and white stripes would make me look fat. I guess I’ll make the best of it.”

“Good for you. Now you’re in the right frame of mind.”

“Hey, speaking of frames, my glasses….”

“Don’t even start.”


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Sara Harricharan 05/07/09
LOL! Such a very realistic conversation...were you the mom or the kid? ^_^ I can relate to this and love your light portrayal of the conversations born out of peer pressure to fit in, Excellent job-and fun title!
Micheline Murray05/08/09
Very Funny!! And right on the mark as far as being realistic for many teens/moms. Great job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/09/09
Very clever and creative, not to mention real. I enjoyed the entry very much.
Charla Diehl 05/09/09
Mothers everywhere can relate to this on target dialog. So glad the mother did not give in to the daughter--sadly too many young mothers do these days. I applaud the strength of the mom and the message this story sends. Thanks.
Marita Thelander 05/10/09
I loved the title. It was a good mother's day read for me. I'm thankful that I never had to have this conversation but I know many who have. But I have been called a dork by my kids a time or two.
Folakemi Emem-Akpan05/11/09
So hilarious. I have not yet had this conversation with my daughter and hope I never do. But I had some serious laughs anyway. Thanks
Sharon Kane05/12/09
Great voice on this daughter, and a very patient Mum. But what I liked best was the title! :)
Carole Robishaw 05/12/09
This was cute, the voices were just right. They have a pretty good rapport considering mom's out.
Lollie Hofer 05/12/09
This was nothing but dialogue and yet I could picture these two in my mind. The back and forth of "in" and "out" was hilarious.
Diana Dart 05/13/09
Bang On! Awesome weaving of the topic, not just in the obvious but a little tickle at the end too. Seriously funny - in a real life way. Soooooo totally in.
Angie Vik05/14/09
Fun!!! I have six daughters and can totally relate.