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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: In and Out (04/30/09)

TITLE: In Motion by God's Hand
By Verna Cole Mitchell
05/05/09


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Like children at play do the ocean waves
Come rollicking, frolicking in.
They toss and tumble, roll and rumble,
As though in a race they must win.

They hurl their hats in the salty air,
And they call to the rising sun,
“Oh come and play with us today;
We’re planning on hours of fun.”

They carry rich gifts in their pockets,
Fine treasures from nautical stores.
They’ve myriads of loveliest sea shells
To bring to the wide sandy shores.

They swell and swirl in a curve and curl,
With a pattern never ceasing,
Until the time that they slide away
With their hold on the beach decreasing.

Like a crowd of courtly gentlemen,
Who bow with a most charming grace,
The waves start receding in dignity,
Still showing their bright shining face.

They ripple and drift and gently rock,
Moving out imperceptibly,
Revealing marine life left behind
From out of the depths of the sea.

The tides’ in-and-out steady rhythm
Is reminder of God’s constancy.
As I gaze at His wondrous creation,
I’m amazed that He thinks about me.


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Sara Harricharan 05/07/09
Your very last line is priceless, it sums up this wonderful piece quite nicely! I loved the image of the waves as dignified gentlemen, I have never thought of it that way before and I like the image I have in my mind now-wonderful job on this! ^_^
Janice Fitzpatrick05/08/09
This is so rich in descriptions and comparisons that you don't hear every day. Very beautiful! I love the playfulness and gentlemanly ways of the ocean. Gorgeously done! I too love the last line-moved my heart.:0) Thx for writing this and for letting the Lord pen through you.
Charla Diehl 05/09/09
This lovely piece will inspire me to view the ocean waves in a poetic manner in the future. The rhyme and meter were A+ and this fit the topic perfectly.
Sonya Leigh05/09/09
Your poem is lovely, full of evocation and beauty. Very well done.
Betty Castleberry05/12/09
I love the imagery here:

"Like a crowd of courtly gentlemen,
Who bow with a most charming grace,"

As always, you've written a lovely poem. Kudos.
Loren T. Lowery05/12/09
I could hear both the sounds of the ocean and the message - both so peaceful and calming. Your words rolled in with the wind and waves and the last line was perfect.
Eliza Evans 05/12/09
What a lovely, lovely tribute.
How WONDERFUL God Is.
Loved the rhyming rhythm here and the visual of tossing hats, filled pockets and courtly gentleman. I could smell the salty air. Thank you for sharing this. GREAT use of the topic.
Lollie Hofer 05/12/09
I grew up in San Diego and could relate to your imagery of the ocean waves. Your descriptions fit perfectly as to the nature of waves. The message of encouragement was lovely as well.
Bryan Ridenour05/12/09
Loved the "Carry rich gifts in their pockets..." section. Great with topic. Well done.
Mona Purvis05/12/09
So refreshing, descriptive and lyrical. Read it to hubby who has been painting some beach scenes.
Yes, I never cease to wonder why God cares for me.
Mona
Patricia Herchenroether05/12/09
What a beautiful picture you painted. I've only seen the ocean a few times, but I could actually hear the breakers. Strange, but I never even thought about the ocean when I was trying to think of an "in and out" entry. Great Job. Love the last part.
Blessings, Patty
Dee Yoder 05/13/09
Lovely images, Verna, and the rhythm of the verse fits the ocean waves as well. Very vivid pictures painted with words. Beautiful!
Diana Dart 05/13/09
Wonderful - from the title, all the way through to the perfect ending. So nice. You're really helping this reader to appreciate poetry!
Gerald Shuler 05/13/09
Gentlemen bowing... I LOVE that image!
Shelley Ledfors 05/13/09
I love this. Really beautiful. I'm lucky enough to live within a few miles of the sea and visit it often, so it holds a special place in my heart. The last lines of your poem will stay in my mind and give one of my favorite things an even deeper meaning, now. Thanks!
Lyn Churchyard05/13/09
I am in awe of the images portrayed here. This is just so, so good.
Beth LaBuff 05/13/09
Beautifully written... LOVE your word choices in this!
Kristen Hester05/14/09
Wonderful! I love the images here. Of all the "ins and outs" I thought of, I didn't think of the ocean. Perfect! Great job, as always. I am in awe of your ability to rhyme words and make it look so easy. You're a champ!
Yvonne Blake 05/14/09
I love this, Verna! Living by the ocean, I see the wonder of it everyday.
Joshua Janoski05/14/09
This was an extremely creative take on this week's topic. Your poetry is so vivid, I could picture the waves rolling in and out. How you do this every week is amazing to me.