The Official Writing Challenge
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05/11/09
You gotta love your MC's care of his partner! I should never read these before I meal… you made my stomach growl. Your story kept my attention.
Nice story. Interesting to the end. Good job.
I liked this story...it was very interesting and the voice sounded very authentic (like a cop). Looks like the MC found "candy" for his partner, but it wasn't a Snickers.
Makes me hungry. I like the hunger for hamburgers instead of the 'ol worn out use of donuts and cops.:0) The ending is cute actually. An innocent mistake made. Cleber writing!
05/12/09
Good read. Thought someone might do the hamburger joint. You wove an interesting story.
Mona
05/12/09
What??? No donuts? Funny read. Loved the double-double. This was unique and I liked the hopeful outcome too.
I NEVER would have seen that without your brick!! very creative of you!
05/13/09
Cute story. I like the characterization of Kippy...sounds like a cop I wouldn't want to mess with! I would not have seen the joke either without the brick.
I love a good story that keeps you reading and has a satisfactory ending. I'd love to try one of those Double-Doubles too with extra onion and BBQ sauce. Good one Dub.
05/13/09
An interesting read that keeps the reader distracted while looking forward towards the final turn of event. It's been such a long time ago since I last ate the juicy burger at In and Out! LoL (",)
05/14/09
Very Creative...especially for prose.
05/14/09
Very creative, Dub. The title should have been a clue to the joke, eh?