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I love this breathing in of God's presence in this very inspirational Poem.
05/07/09
very beautiful! The imagery is breathtaking and the verse with "I need, I want" is so very true. Wonderful!
Very beautifully arranged. Wonderful desriptions. Some of my favorite lines-My soul, my life,
Yearning, grasping.
I need, I want,
Your breath on me.

Like a waterfall from heights above,
Your power washes me.
Like a wind across the prairie grass,
Your mercy exhaled to me.
Lovely!
05/09/09
Powerful imagery and words throughout this beautiful poem--and at the end of the read, I too felt at peace. Thanks.
I LOVED READING THIS POEM WITH MY DEEP BREATHING EXERCISING AND MEDITATION ON GOD'S WORD. GREAT WRITE, MARILYN
Lovely and inspirational with vivid imagery. Well done.
05/12/09
As a read this poem, I found myself taking deep breaths. By the end of the poem a peace really did come over me. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.
05/12/09
I too had to laugh out loud about my manure (taxes) being useful. Great analogy. There's about 50 acres of farmland directly behind our house. The farmer likes to use manure as well when planting. He prefers sheep manure. Go figure, you can even choose the kind you want to use. Too bad we don't have more in the say as to where our manure (I mean, taxes) is spread. Thanks for sharing.
05/12/09
Oops! Hee, hee! Wrong story. I don't know I managed to back up one story but I did. My humblest of apologies. I'll let the next writer know to look on this page for their comments. If they haven't left you a comment yet, maybe they'll read your story as well and leave some lovely comments.
Even more than a poem, I could hear this being a praise song being sung at church. Beautifully written!
What beautiful poetry. I found myself sighing when I was through reading it-so calming, like the Psalms.
Blessings,
Patty

PS Lollie's having a bad day.
lol.
05/13/09
Very lovely and meaningful!
05/13/09
Just lovely. Love the comparison of the wind across the prairie grass. Just right.

I couldn't help but LOL reading Lollie's comment.

Good use of words.
Mona
05/13/09
A beautiful praise and worship poem! The many lovely phrases and descriptions brought refreshment and peace to me.
All of your writings of late have such an inspirational and inspired feel to them. Very uplifting and a pleasure to read. This is no exception to the good work you are doing.
05/13/09
This is absolutely lovely. Thanks!
05/13/09
I really appreciate your simple style. It draws attention to the fact that God is truly all we need.
Calming, peacefully visual and very enjoyable. Thank you.
Like a cool stream of crystal water,
Your presence revives my soul.
Like the rains that fall to a barren land,
Your compassion tends to me.

BEAUTIFUL!